I recently moved back to where I'm at, and my boy been tryin to get me back into writing. Over the weekend we recorded two songs.
"All Around Me"
1st verse: J. Lace
2nd verse: myself
Bridge: J. Lace
"Dopeness"
1st verse: me
2nd verse: J. Lace
feedback appreciated, good or bad!! dont matter to me, it's been like 4 years since I've sat down and written anything, so all criticism is appreciated!
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"all around me" - im a fan of that instrumental
j.lace was pretty sick with his flow n content, only complaint was the mixing, vocals were pretty quiet
ur flow tho was a little odd, not sure what to say about it, not terrible i can maybe hear some potential, rusty i suppose since ya said its been 4 years
"dopeness"
ur verse was a bit better than in the other track, j.lace pretty decent again
ur accent n somethin about the flow sorta remind me of "dead silence"
anyways keep at it, shake the rust off
j.lace was pretty sick with his flow n content, only complaint was the mixing, vocals were pretty quiet
ur flow tho was a little odd, not sure what to say about it, not terrible i can maybe hear some potential, rusty i suppose since ya said its been 4 years
"dopeness"
ur verse was a bit better than in the other track, j.lace pretty decent again
ur accent n somethin about the flow sorta remind me of "dead silence"
anyways keep at it, shake the rust off
facin me? its mission impossible, like pickin up lesbian broads
fuck all these thespian frauds, they "bug me" like espionage
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nice shyt i liked the all around me shyt nice beat an the flow was pretty good from both but like that ^ need better mixn a bit like me
2nd beat was my fav this was dope the vocal maybe a lil to loud but stayed nice completly dope shyt an u do remind me of Dead Silence evr so slightly
keep'em comin
2nd beat was my fav this was dope the vocal maybe a lil to loud but stayed nice completly dope shyt an u do remind me of Dead Silence evr so slightly
keep'em comin
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
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