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Lost The Plot

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I`ll return feed on this one



Before recession's struck business was fried
his hoods been fucked up since the industry died
they were promised new jobs but the ministry lied
He's 15 n its 05
A government statistic, on the real he's a label
Since his feet in the cradle, from foetal to fatal
They steal from his table, and life aint been kind to him
N hes gone kinda crazy since that knife blade inside of him
Strife just collide with him, every day stress tend to build
his brothers locked up and his best friend was killed
blood tends to spill, will he get it on with the reaper?
He still live at home but his mothers no longer his keeper
rejected his faith, does that make him stronger or weaker?..

He's a wannabe tough guy, almost psychotic
its all so chaotic, cheap booze, no small dosed narcotics
almost robotic, broken wings, he cant take flight up out it
future bright he doubt it, plenty drama, one day he'll write about it
No grip on life to route it, like a bull seein red when the mist will fall
when he goes to sleep all he see is death in the crystal ball
Will he be missed at all?
Who knows, his brains got impaled, he had his shot and failed
He don't wanna rot in jail but his train of thoughts de railed
Fates tight knot prevailed, and he's lost his refinement
No regrets, his guilty conscience is locked in confinement
Cant stop his assignment, price of life? the cost of what?
He don't give a fuck….hes lost the plot
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No grip on life to route it, like a bull seein red when the mist will fall
when he goes to sleep all he see is death in the crystal ball

^loved that part. very nice.

This was a dope ass drop. Liked the imagery, the rhyme schemes were nice as hell, especially liked the label/cradle/fatal scheme. Overall, this piece was nice. Glad everyone is getting on the topical side of things, it shows real talent.
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Post by Lotus »

for real man love this drop. i connect wit it alot. like that fetal/fatal shit...

Who knows, his brains got impaled, he had his shot and failed
He don't wanna rot in jail but his train of thoughts de railed
Fates tight knot prevailed, and he's lost his refinement
No regrets, his guilty conscience is locked in confinement

def my favorite part
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Post by complexity »

You have proved with this drop that you're the best battler who writes on the site. I don't think, that can be contested much.

"He still live at home but his mothers no longer his keeper
rejected his faith, does that make him stronger or weaker?.. "

Obviously, I thought this was the strongest line. I love when MC's have the ability to get philosophical which is a very underrated part of writing.

I also like the rhyme that Ruckus quoted.
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Post by Phenom »

"A government statistic, on the real he's a label
Since his feet in the cradle, from [fetal] to fatal"

"Strife just collide with him, every day stress tend to build
his brothers locked up and his best friend was killed
blood tends to spill, will he get it on with the reaper?
He still live at home but his mothers no longer his keeper
rejected his faith, does that make him stronger or weaker?.."

deep shit, right there. Not lyrically complex, but gets its message and mood accross well.

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Post by Cee4 »

lol tahaks for the feed swingers. bit fucked right now i`ll return the feed next time when imm soberlol props ruckus u gave me feed a few times n ive been slackin. shit i aint usually an emotional drunk!
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^^^
damn

uppin lol
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shits fire

Post by JDough »

sum tight ass lyrics look forward to your critiques on my shit
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

.. This Was Pretty Koo, i Would Quote a Few Things But i`m On Mah Phone ..
Anyways, it Seems Like Tha Usual Bad Kid`s Spit, Thas Why i Wasn't Feelin it as Much as Everybody Else ..
But it Was a Koo Piece Tho ..
Couple Of Parts Were Pretty Sick ..
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.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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