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Yung_Flow
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Post by Yung_Flow »

[font=Arial]....Yoo...On Some Real Shit...

and i know you've been broken ,I know you've been scarred
I know it sometimes hurts to breathe
I know every moment of everything you feel when the pain brings you to your kness
but Im not her and he's not you, and this isn't then, it's now
and I don't have all the answers babe but I know we'll make it somehow
we're gonna make it together forever I swear just give me a moment to wipe away your tears
grab my hand - we'll put one foot in front of the next and never look back so don't ever forget
i'm here with you ...

^ This Part Is How I Feel About Ma Shorty....
I Can Relate 2 Dis In Many Ways

Props On Dis Kid, I Feel You 100%

Keepin' Doin Yuh Thinq G..

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Post by The Gonz »

My assumptions were correct! Excellent imagery, you definitely have a way with words. This piece is dripping with emotion and does an excellent job of captivating the audience and drawing their attention. Like mentioned before, it was universal, but personal at the same time, almost makes the reader wish you wrote it for them.

There are times I know something I do reminds you
I see his shadow come across your face
and Instead of leaving you to your misery
I wrap my arms around you to keep you safe
cause nothing hurts like a flashback
a vision of how it was before me
I can't take away your memories,
but I can give you new things to remember

^^Favorite part. I've been down that road so I can definitely relate to what you're saying here.
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Post by Time Line »

I love poems especially very talented ones, coming from very attractive females, shows she got brains, unlike the blondes. Good shit propz
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Post by Glamtrash »

Thanks guys
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