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Begining tah End

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a verse i did wid a cat named LArkin from Six/Goldmic





His verse was Ill, but this iz Just me!







Strated as a newb, but Grew to a Great
befriended a few catz, N let loose on dah fakez
sent a few trackz; Joined groups for Debatez
six called them crews, I Only new them as Bait
only a Few had dah Traitz to ammuse N get Praise
from the youth of this state; i went from Quixotic to Quix
people started Biting, changing styles; getting all Chaotic n shit
I then molded to Vexx, and catz stopped BOLDING THERE TEXT
disses and keys were getting Sold by dah sets;
by dah Ghostz AND ole vetz; dah fake foez, wid fake flowz i chose to neglect!
appointed a mod of a thread, by dah Boss of dah Sted!
won a bunch of thread battles but still a couple losses tah Shed!
NIKKUHZ, Switching there Styles, pretending wut they Grippin is Titles
sorry you ain't Winning this Trial! CATZ started and Elevated there Game
Chi money n Brutal BArz's heat, levatated tah Flamez! Itagrated there names
Quix slick too, often Irrated by lamez; Often 'Bring up shit' like Regergatation
Obsured and Blatent while mah theories often left tah guess at or Interpretations
Quix and Lark Disturb yah NAtion just Refer tah Ratings dah best of Earths Creations!
Now there some new catz like Scott n Fekt Droppin Text...Call this dah New Age
itz a New Place, wid New Greatz who Do MAke Yah Dudes Shake
from new Tastes....as well some New Fakes wid Deception and Trickery
but i still spit bout Real shit like Elections and Imagry
Politics have Symmirty, Rivalry has Reperacausions
Doubt one thing i jsut said, white bread will See Cocncusions
Real Recognize Real ... who dah Fuck is you???

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Post by precise »

not bad man, interestin story lol, good flow, pretty straight forward rhymescheme so it was easy to follow
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facin me? its mission impossible, like pickin up lesbian broads
fuck all these thespian frauds, they "bug me" like espionage
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THANKS P ^
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nice i loiked this
the flow was pretty simple
but effective with this piece
the vocab was pretty good
no major multies or shit
it was an enjoyable read
pretty good well done on
this props
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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word ^ thankz Doggy!
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Post by complexity »

I thought the story was effective as well. Some of the more complicated rhyme schemes I have seen from you. Its also good to see you do something more than just punchlines. I thought you narrated what by default is an extremely boring story and made it kinda exciting. Good job.
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Thankz Plex...Preciate the feed!
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