unspoken face

[Lucky D]

So many reach for fame, and tears creep from strain/
Watchin' men bleed in vain, laid across seeds in rain/
Withered trees and grain, we teach appease tha pain/
Steadily seekin' reign, only for those who speak with feign/
These are tha truest thangs, really hard to explain/
Atrocities inhumane, only to sustain there true domain/
We are who to blame, for words spoken through disdain/
Considered in-sane, for thoughts that are too mundane/
Still I view tha same, only now I gotta go through chains/
Leavin' a broken cage, focused on enclosing rage/
These are tha worldly ways, paraphrased in tha book of praise/
You can look for days, end up in a crooked maze/
Grasp tha hook and chase, or begin to change your phase/
Start to set ablaze tha delays of today's essays/
Were still left in a haze, lost in a unknown place/
Unspoken face, with no hope left to be saved/

[Lucky D]

no feed

[MagicMark]

nice use of rhymescheme and multis... flow was solid.. subject matter was a little varied, but understandable with the rhyming as it was.. in some parts it felt a little forced to get the rhyme in, that would be my only complaint.. good piece..

[Lucky D]

Thanks man appreciated