How I Cry

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How I Cry

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Staring at a river...
at the same place I stood last year...
Watching you on the other side...
sitting there perfect...
on cement stairs, in the plaza square...
a beautiful brown jacket..
perfect glowing face...
reading "Atlas Shrugged"...
I come out the taxi cab...
behind myself..
wishing I was anyone else...

No amount of money...
smiles..
games..
climbing mountains...
changes that image...
seared into my memory...
forever...

Why did I keep talking...
when there was nothing left to say..
dropping tears of the impossible...
into that river...

Time makes everything so clear...
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The flow and the shortness of the bars give this a unique touch.
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im a fan of this style...just messages..short and crisp with a flow.
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it was pretty goood poetry wise, reminds me more of spoken word or haiku, i tend to always make my poems rhyme, i guess its just habit but, this was pretty good and i can relate to the story freal
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Very Vivid Short But A Great Read Good Job'
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beautiful man, self reflection is good shit! always makes for a great poem and that is what you pulled off here, I really liked it! wish you would write more poetry my friend.
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