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Ten Valiums

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what you want for lunch a knuckle sandwich
why I care about this earth, fuck this planet
if it burned down today I wouldn't give a damn
sick of people bitching on twitter and instagram
I been drinking liquor to make my mind disappear
broken dreams until closing scenes
I'm going to die living here
only way I'm going to shine is in an urn as a souvenir
immuned to love too much doing drugs
my human condition isn't improving none
hopin and wishin on the stars
for a future that just isn't in the cards
pissin' away every precious moment
while I sit here and pray for a better omen

Every night I’m depressed fighting the stress
Even at the height of my success
My life was a mess full of chaos and dread
I pray in my head that I wake up in bed
From a seance attempt and I raise from the dead
But I’m wasting my breath I’m just waiting for death
Calculating how many days I have left
I’m placing a bet I don’t make it past fifty
Except if my paths shifts three sixty
degrees backwards I”ll end up a casualty
To a sad imagination and a mad affection
Besides if magically I win when i battle the beast
This black savage that has raised a bad catholic
Got one life to live so i might as well take a stab at it

I use to dream about money and riches
Living on a beach with palm trees
Calmly, under the sun beating vicious
Having fun, always doing something of interest
With tons of funds from my business
A funny existence that was flung from a distance
Now there’s nothing to witness just a funk and an illness
Bunch of fulfillments that will never come to fruition
My number one mission is to get drunk and belligerent
Dumb and ignorant like this country of idiots
All the eventual hazards quagmires and technicalities
can be erased with a spectacular messed up fatalities
Those benzodiazepines could end in tragic scenes
Ten valiums will make you challenge you're mental realities
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never knew the site was back up, so im super late on the feedback, but i personally was not feelin this, rhymescheme is there but just not my cup of tea personally, i couldn't vibe with more than half of it
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I didn't really like it, reading over it again. I just loved the opener, what you want for lunch a knuckle sandwich
why I care about this earth, fuck this planet
if it burned down today I wouldn't give a damn
sick of people bitching on twitter and instagram, didn't know where to from there. haha
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,"Every night I’m depressed fighting the stress
Even at the height of my success
My life was a mess full of chaos and dread
I pray in my head that I wake up in bed"

The main bars that stood out. There were a few interesting things said here and there but overall it was very spotty.
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