I've faced death in many ways,but ain't been told that I'm FUCKED//
so Fuck you Fuck ME Fuck this World and this LUCK//
What the Fuck do you WANT,I ain't even started life MAN//
got me out here running the streets,feeling like some sort of HYPE MAN//
I guess I threw the dice and,gambled for real//
give a fuck if this text even holds.... appeal//
I just need to releive this tension I feel in my chest//
throat feeling like when slugs come in contact with vest//
what I feel is UNREST,I guess I'm lost in this PAIN//
got some bad news today,and with that Im ashamed//
Hepatitus,yeah the disease of the streets//
preventable.... ,my stupidity speaks//
Fuck YOU and any one who want to judge this......
Ill critique 2 other post as soon as possible...
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/my-town-vt24935.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/not-n ... 24854.html
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Last edited by FatalX on Thu Dec 01, 2011 5:51 am, edited 1 time in total.
I CHANNEL all my ENERGY,
while my SPIRIT is SOLEMN//
you HEAR my WORDS in the STREETS-->
because I'm SPEAKING in VOLUMES//
I'm like the MEDIA with QUESTIONS-I never stop SHOOTING
so IF you really got a PROBLEM-we can make this EXCLUSIVE...//
while my SPIRIT is SOLEMN//
you HEAR my WORDS in the STREETS-->
because I'm SPEAKING in VOLUMES//
I'm like the MEDIA with QUESTIONS-I never stop SHOOTING
so IF you really got a PROBLEM-we can make this EXCLUSIVE...//
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Re: hep
oh ok...i dint get the title or what u were really talking about at first but when i read it and finished...i got it...pretty nice quick read and FUCK YOU TOO DAWG...
srry to hear u got that tho..
srry to hear u got that tho..
-_sarcastically speaking_-
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Re: hep
Sorry to hear that.
As for the rhyme, it's ok. Nothing to special from a technical aspect. Obviously, a lot of emotion in it's content, though. Definitely worth reading.
As for the rhyme, it's ok. Nothing to special from a technical aspect. Obviously, a lot of emotion in it's content, though. Definitely worth reading.
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Re: hep
I agree completely with Kau. But fuck technicalities. You spat what you felt, and that more than anything really speaks volumes on your character. Keep your head up, bruh.
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Re: hep
Damn.
At first, I was put off by all the "Fuck"'s,
But, as I kept reading, it became much more clear.
Short drop,
Full of emotion.
Pain..
Sorry to hear about this,
Always remember. Life goes on.
<3
At first, I was put off by all the "Fuck"'s,
But, as I kept reading, it became much more clear.
Short drop,
Full of emotion.
Pain..
Sorry to hear about this,
Always remember. Life goes on.
<3
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