Hypno - Hel And Back
I,ve been through hel and back and left my personal demons to burn there.
Been granted redemption and redeemed from the curse of evilness.
I feel peaceful and pure again, in the seventh heaven not concerned with a thing.
Don't even have the urge to sin anymore, determind to win.
While going against a merciless windstorm, won't git torn apart by it.
Cause my soul has been blessed with a gift from the lord.
I,m like Mozes splitting the ocean, leaving his egyptian opponents
Feeling ridicoulously stupid, used to be a pillager
Stealing essential goods from the rich.
Now i'm rebuilding the village i slew.
Knowing that they are victims too
In this unholy prison of putrid.
And you all shall be forgiven forgood.
if you all listen to the words of wisdom.
Coming from the loyal assistent of Truth.
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Hypno - Hel And Back
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Re: Hypno - Hel And Back
this had a good story in it but i must say it rhymed kinda awkwardly in some parts, the flow seemed choppy, in a few parts, i did notice your rhyme scheme but i dont know just seemed a bit awkward, but it's a nice piece i liked the story and concept alot
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