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nightmares of the bottom remake

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finally finished

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h6ISGtrL1Io

sitting at the bottom, day dreaming of the top
most people would die screaming just to get a shot
blood sweat and tears have got me where i am
fly from the start, i'll never ever land
deuces to the haters, full speed ahead
hope i got some luck, guess i'l break a rabbits leg
stay on my grind until it's game over
feel sorry for you, Wayne, it's hard staying sober
joking about my problems, cause everyone has got 'em
dark nights got me on the edge, i must be stalking gotham
no, i'll never soften, a gun? yes i got one
stopping's not an option and this kush has got me coughing
gotta keep speaking on every thought i have
my thoughts keep leaking and i just gotta laugh
when it comes to bitches, i'll never let'em keep me down
money on my mind, it knows where to meet me now
ok
getting sick tired of this minimum wage shit
i'd rather blow dro and throw some shows in vegas
money clothes and swishers, thats all i'll really need
shit i forgot the strippers and a sack of cali weed
i represent the east, the south's where i will die
when it comes to home, b-town's where i reside
never tell lie, keeping it at a hundred makes sense
i'm head of the table, better know your placement
face it i ain't never gonna be down with fake shit
i'm straight faced while my haters need a face lift
i'm far from basic, you should already know this
it's common to get evicted without a final notice
i may end up homeless, weathering the coldness
try breaking my spirit, being soulless has a bonus
even though this has finally gotten my attention
i still plan on starting a dynasty with all my henchmen
ok
hell, i don't know what fame is, i just want to be famous
i don't even give a shit if you know what my name is
i'll be in the game , still balling budget
i respect my crew and they respect my judgment
i am never budging, stand firm in my beliefs
i know that their cousins, cause i dream of death in my sleep
life isn't hard, that shit is fucking complicated
and don't pop off if you are not carbonated
i am but man standing in this crowded room
don't feel lonely, but i do feel impending doom
cause everyones snake waiting to be found
can't relate with fakes, it's them i'm not around
feet on the ground, head in the clouds
i just want my fam to be standing in the crowd
gotta make 'em proud of all of my decisions
if only they could see inside my head and through my vision
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yeeaa i lik this man its short but i wanna hear it to audio.. depending on how u deliver it this cold b good fam. keep writing
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yeah agree... shit would be a sick audio.. like your opening line.. very descriptive and true.. easily relatable


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Damn u for making this long for me to read lol. I liked this written regardless. It had a nice flow, and some hot lines. I'd say the structure was basic, but nontheless this was a gr8 piece & I agree with both the guys above me .. this would be a good audio, mainly cuz of its flow as I've mentioned. Keep it up man, peace
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I like, I can relate to most of the stuff in this, I like your style, even though i disslike Lil Wayne, these lyrics make Lil Wayne better aha, be intresting to hear your delivery on this audio, keep up the good work man.
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