waitin for an opportune moment
while im floatin out in orbit,
eyes peeled like an orange
to the point i sleep wit one eye open,
pray that i stay dope,
call it high hopin'
i spit coke,
radios just diet pepsi,
imma shake up rap till its flat,
perplexing
lyrics make you tap on the mat,
yall fake as a wrestlin act,
my rap break any regular man,
you dont get it
like celebate men,
yall jus too plain,
celery stems,
i go dumb like stimpy n wren,
imma golden goose surrounded by hens,
a pen n a pad can be found in my hands,
realize theres sumthin profound in my hands,
i chop it up like edward scissors hands,
makes me stick out like the scary movie 2 hand
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opportune moment
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opportune moment
stoned locomotion, im highly trained, flow fluid with pricy strains
Re: opportune moment
Iuno man this was alright. Its short again like ur other writtens. Gotta make em longer man.
U say u hope to stay dope and then u claim ur ill in this verse..
Seems like ur contradicting yourself there fam.
Plenty of room for improvement tho, this is probly the best way to get better.
Try a topical written, maybe thats your fortay, just giv it a shot.
Lyrical spits are cool but when there all u got it does get a little repetitive. Try new things man open that box in your head.
No hate just givin some pointers from were im sittin.
Stay up lookin forward to more
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U say u hope to stay dope and then u claim ur ill in this verse..
Seems like ur contradicting yourself there fam.
Plenty of room for improvement tho, this is probly the best way to get better.
Try a topical written, maybe thats your fortay, just giv it a shot.
Lyrical spits are cool but when there all u got it does get a little repetitive. Try new things man open that box in your head.
No hate just givin some pointers from were im sittin.
Stay up lookin forward to more
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bringin' heat but not the same shit your cats on
Re: opportune moment
this was aight ..i kinda liked the last one a lil better..but keep doin ya thing man...1
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Big Island Crypt
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/first ... 11676.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/okay- ... 12393.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/tre-t ... 12597.html
http://www.zshare.net/download/6399071566e45a94/
^^Hustle Life Mixx Tape^^
[align=center][/align]
Ya gettin Bodied qwik chop you up like a saw mill..my Lines are 2 Raw "yeah" i should get my Bars Grilled!!!
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0hgN0MacRqg&feature=fvst[/video]
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IZ-VXwki ... ature=plcp[/video]
It's Jah boy "Tre Tru" holla
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