Popping my MC Cherry

[TakTix]

STARTING OUT IS WHAT WE FIND FUCKING HARD
SOMETIMES YOU END UP BEING A RETARD
BUT LET EM KNOW ITS YOUR BELIEF
YOU DON'T CARE WHAT OTHERS THINK
IT'S A MATTER OF SHOWING YOURSELF
SO LET EM KNOW YOU DON'T MELT
TO THE CRITICAL SITUATIONS
THAT CAUSE FRAGMENTATIONS
TO STAB YOU IN THE HEART
LEAVE YOU BLEEDING IN THE DARK
WAITING FOR SOMEONE TO SHOW YOU THE LIGHT
JUST TO SEE WHERE YOU AT IN THE LIFE
OF THE LONLEY WITHOUT A WIFE
THAT LOVES YOU WITH ALL HER SOUL
YOU JUST CARE BOUT SMOKIN ANOTHER BOWL
OF THAT STICKY PURPLE BUDS OR EVEN
THAT SICK ASS ICKY BAMMER NUGS
HOLD THAT BONG LIKE IF YOU WANTED A HUG
WITH BOTH HANDS AND NEVER LET GO
JUST HIT THAT SHIT TILL YOU FEEL YOUR MIND FLOW
TO THE MUSIC THAT YOU LISTEN TO OF THE BAND
OTHERSHIT ALSO THAT MAKES YOU UNDERSTAND
HOW TO LET IT GO WHENVER YOUR READY
DON'T COME CROOKED COME STEADY
WITH ALL YOU GOTTA SHOW
FUCK THEM BITCHES AND THEM HOES
ITS ALL BOUT THE DRUGS AND THE DOE
AND IM OUTSKINS TO THIS SHIT
LATERS ALL I GOTTA TAKE 1 MORE HIT
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[MesaR]

Pritty Basic Buh thats coo keep on at it I can see impovement .. Good JoB

[TakTix]

Thanks for the positive comment i was afraid i was gonna get nothing but hate towards it i mean i tried and all over time i get better i just spend more time working on it thanks again

[Viral]

id bother reading wat u say except im not into black on black text...n im not highlightin it

[Invincible]

No kidding change that shit man

[TakTix]

How can I change it I don't know how lol

[MesaR]

lol if u write some thing on new topic go 2 chnage couler Font And ayo Tak If u Got Msn hit me upp wid it !!

[TakTix]

Aight thanks bro I got how to use it now

[TakTix]

And nah I aint got msn I got wack ass yahoo

[precise]

freeflo's a beginner like you tictac's, you guys should get ahold of each other and cypher etc, get elevated

yea i wont hate on what you wrote, just keep at it

[TakTix]

Thanks bro ima keep working at my words for a long time I read words from the dictionary to get my vocabulary going and thanx for the feedback all really helps me

[Ambiguous Realm]

i use to read words from the dictionary too.. but then i decided to stop doing my work in school.. n e ways.. a dictionary helps improve ur vocabulary but u dont need vocabulary to rap as long as u have a flow to it.. if u want to make ur verse more complex u can try using multis since it doesn't require much vocabulary.. although u can make it interesting by randomly picking words out of the dictionary and trying to break it down into syllables then rhyming off of it.. that's how i first started out... and look where i'm at now..(no where lol..yet)

[precise]

lol, actually a wider vocabulary helps alot, its not necessary, but you can broaden your structures with a better vocab, like havin more rhymes to choose from, not just sayin the same shit other people do, sorta switchin it up ya know?

anyways the biggest part of elevatin is practicin, good luck with it

[complexity]

Yah. A vocabulary is really important from my perspective. Your better then some beginners T* keep it up

[TakTix]

Thanks ppl ima start more writing right now this site is coo since I went to other one and they dissed me I was like forget you guys then but you guys seem coo bout it and letting me learn off it and not sending me packing lol thanx all