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shattered dreamz

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im told i need to express my self...
so i suppose its great that im sharin this...
But its not arrogance ....
when i say Fuck marrige counseling & i hate the therapist.
she says Marriage is built on compromise
So u will work this out... if you Care a bit
Now.... Go she Waits to take Care of this...
Look Bitch... I TOLD u strait.. Ur Error is..
Joseph don’t negotiate with Terrorists!

YA Ever had Ya Dreams Shattard?
Lost everything that once seems mattered?
Worn out Till Ur Souls Fabrics Seams Tattered
im Talkin Deeper than Bruises.. WHen Ur Beings Battered
Well thats My Life.. Yet when i write it seems Sadder..
I shut my eyes & all i hear is growin Screams Scatter
Like when i tied up my ex & kept throwin things at her

I go to watch my amigo walter's Weed Grow
Transformed into my alter ego
Ended up on a beach with his Daughter
No i DIDNT assualt her... please yo...
nothing but The Breeze ...Salt water & sea gulls
with this Hot lil mexican Chick..So i wanna Talk Macho
& Hopfully shell be gettin some cock nacho's
But the Only thing i New in Spanish was
( I WANT TO EAT UR SOFT TACO)
& she didnt undertsnad it when i said
Fuck me or ill cut u ... i Brought my Mach Quatro
she didnt know if i was a joker er what to Think of Gringos
i didnt need to know her... or speak the Lingo...
to know To Choke her as i Poked her in her pink Flamingo
What provoked her to think im single?
i been Fuckin my sex therapist -with just a Wink She tingles
Shit i Never thought shed Mingle Damn!!!!
Couldn't find condoms.. thank god i brought a Pringles can

Got the chick back to my crib
Hoping she Sucks & Swallows..
Hopin some Bustin Follows...
Shell get Skull fucked till its fuckin hallow..
Cuz Mouths & cocks go like Socks & puppets..
HERE it Comes bitch dont Talk just suck it...
Few gulps Laters... Shes YELLin it wont Stop so Fuck it...
You stay here ill go get Mops & buckets...
she has to swim in my living room.. my cock just floods it..
Rescue workers at the door that Flouting Furnituer blocks..
& the cops Dont budge it...
they flew in lifejackets by the thousands & stock the public
NATRAL DISASTER of the Week. & THE TALK shows Love it
They say it doubles Katrinas Cost & budget...


Been forever & a day since i posted last
Well... Only thing i think i needed to Explain was...
Mach Quatro im talkin about a razor... even tho it turns out
mach & quatro are 2 diff razors... Oh well lol.

Leave Feed ill return the favor...
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Re: shattered dreamz

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Look Bitch... I TOLD u strait.. Ur Error is..
Joseph don’t negotiate with Terrorists!
Shit was funny!
i didnt need to know her... or speak the Lingo...
to know To Choke her as i Poked her in her pink Flamingo
WOW!!!
Shit i Never thought shed Mingle Damn!!!!
Couldn't find condoms.. thank god i brought a Pringles can
LMAO!!!

Had some tight flow and lines in there....and the fun level of this read was astronomical...! over all i like this piece but i think u supposed to feed on 2 post by other people and put the links on ur thread.... but u prolly know that....so big ups good read
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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thx for feed.. yea.. damn i for got links.. i did feed to ruckus
ill feed another..


Good lookin out.
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This was purdy dope
going for some shocker lines I see...very nice work tho'
came across smoothly and very nice....keep writing my dude
you got some skills!!
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Re: shattered dreamz

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I was rollin' when I read dis line

What provoked her to think im single?
i been Fuckin my sex therapist -with just a Wink She tingles

pink flamingo line was pretty funny 2 haha

good drop keep doin' u nigga
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