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Emotion

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Ive stayed awake for the 6th day strait &
My Brains Dazed and racin... Pacein
The Fiber of my soul is Frayed n breakin...
I Asked Jesus For help.........He must be delayed....
Im waitin!!!
Now whos too afraid to prey to satan?
he says My Brain should Stay Blazzed and BakIn...
Like It was bastin & Draped in Honey glazzed bacon..
stay high so u dont see the Sunny Days wastin...
Joey realize u live in Funny & Crazed nation...
Now heres Some Money n a Play station...
but Nothing in this World is Free Dummy....
so i Say we trade son...
Now I need U to Infect Dwayne wade with Aids
and Then Tape him rapin Clay Aiken.


Blazzed as Hell... Shit im Crazed as Well...
more fucked up than ur daughter gettin laid at Twelve
Im Claus-traphobic... So i Shot Santa -
Then Slayed his Elfs...
So Evil Ill get a parades in Hell..
I know Saint Nick Regrets he came here...
But he was Brave as Well
i Dont Think...HE even Made A NOISE
Even when i ate his Rein Deer... & Ebayed his Toys
See how Loco Weed made this Boy?
No Tellin Who his Frees May Destroy!


Still all My Feed backs like...
joey i got the Notion ur Dreaming...
You go through the Motions its seemin..
But what your Postin should pack Emotion N meaning...
This is an Art Form.. & ur lack of Devotions
Demeaning..


Well Fine...
Have You Ever had Your life destroyed before?
Fighting the Stife is the Price...Deployed To War
Trustin ur wife as much as u like...
Isnt this what Porn n Sex Toys is for?
In the back of ya mind still Frightened shes Tifflin
& who enjoyed the Whore?
Shits Fragile... Tensions is Hightend..
So this is Shit ya Can't Mention when writing
It would just annoy it More...
But I Return home...
and Hear Nothing But Rummors Since..I Flew IN tho...
Back to Wondering is ya Wifes been a Live True Bimbo?
Was she messin around so much
...Our Bedrooms got a Drive through Window?
even if its Not true... I Feel like the FOOL...
A Clown... A Dancing sucker...
Rummors 1st Sgt Sent me Overseas
just so hed have the chance to fucker...
Did This Unconfirmed Skank..... Really try to Earn Rank...
Being a Human Sperm bank?
I need the Truth Bitch ...
To the point were You Guess No More!
How many Dudes Are on Our post?
Did... U eff those Whore?
i heard u brought more smiles to Troops
than a.... U-S-O tour...
Fucked up Metal Images.. Disgustin N Sick..
I Mean i was all Trustin and shit...
out Riskin my life while shes sucking his Dick?
IF i knew it was True..
Id have A machete and be Thrusting it Quick...
But the only Evidence i found sugests
she was Fucking a Chick???
Not that is matters Now...
From the Min my Plane took Off And Lifted .....it Started...
i was Gone for a long while ....we Drifted n Parted...

Our World is Wild Twisted & Dark...
She waited Till the day i came Home...
Then this Vile Sadistic Bitch Starts
She picks up my Heart...
& Just smiles & rips it apart
So Next time You Fall in Love...
Thinkin Ud Mabey Invest a Wife...
Remeber... Before She Lies and Says ..
Yes for the Rest of her Life... Fuck the Stress n the strife...
Quickest way to a bitch’s heart is...
through her chest with a Knife...
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Re: Emotion

Post by Riggz »

Damn, shit was longer than R.Kelly's "Closet" Joey you could've broken this shit up into three parts or somethin' LOL!
-"Im Claus-traphobic... So i Shot Santa - " LOL! I think i heard that on Spongebob LOL!

I take it you a soldier? 1st Sergent/Rank/USO, etc.

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Re: Emotion

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Our Bedrooms got a Drive through Window?

I almost choked on my pop tart when I read that lol. This shit was nice as hell man, all the shit about yer ex, definitely felt it. Good to see you putting your frustration and anger into something constructive again lol. The multies were sick, the images were twisted as always. Youve always reminded me of a cross between Eminem and Rob Zombie lol. Stay active man, youve definitely gotten much better.
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Re: Emotion

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uppin... n Bored
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Re: Emotion

Post by eMCee Havic »

man this piece was long man could be almost 2 songs really
but there is some damn good content, the title tells it all. on the ole low down and dirty tip.

yeah i agree with ruckus your definatly improving since the last piece i read of yours

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