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See Plex gave You a Hand Shake.. i'ma Shake ya Hand Flick ya Cards N Laminate Ya Man ..
Plastic Divin Like Ya Handz In ya Chest..Eliminate Ya Fam.. Demanding Respect Like The Sacrid Clan..
"Black Ya Out!!" The Door .. I Doubt Your For 'Pain..You Cn't Bear The Amount In Store!!
Lawgix Wont Get Livin Space i'll Destroy His House N More Shoutin War!!
You Got My Word Like What A Mouth Is For, Sport Your Fountain Soar..
Ass On Paper A Daily Thing!! You Won't 'Pull A Explosion' Like Israli's Strings!!
Your Nicer SCREW YOU! On No Nail Me Fling, Dood's Like A Snail He Clings..
I'ma "Rock Um Slim" Like Who's Joints Hailey Sing's.. Fat Fuck Need Back Up..
Get Up Back On Ya Feet Hump Back..Stat's Tough? Please Back Up,
Dead Stuck Dat Lama Increased Pump Clap's.. Hit With a Piece it's a Wrap N Not a Piece Of Some Rap
It's The Release That Spun Back The Angel That Was Pin'd On Lawgix Like THUMB TACKZ!..(BRAT! BRAT!) ..
See The Mourge .. Tell Ghost i'll 'Pay Extra's A Visit' So He's Insured.. To Face The Same Till his Waste is Drained,
Pissed While His Face is Flamed.. I'ma Number Cat's Down Like Inmates In Chains!!
I've Bin Jason Fake.. It's Fry Day Let Me Gather Wood For Bakin's Sake!!..

Ghost Ghost I'ma Let Ya Roast Like I Aint a Savior You Can't Catch Me Next Ta Smoke!!
Ekom's Evolution Aint On My Level I Progress With Rope's..
Strivin 4 a Better Picture While Yall Take Acceptive Stroke's
i Stay On The Go Never Expect To Choke, Float My Boat On a Calm N Collective Note
Chillen In West Palm With Money , Blueprints..Sess N Dope..Plus a Treasure Chest Of Hope..
My Blood's Fine..Do You Bring Pressure NOPE!..You Pig's Get Smacked With Curtin's..
Show's Over A Bag Of Perrkin's Will Help Pass The Hurtin Take ya Caff's Insertin Blade's Brink Had Fa Surfin..
The Road Of An Average Person..Who You 'Clock-in' Ur Bad Fa Workin..
U N Ghost Go Off Each Other..No PLASTIC SURGIN!!
Your A Old BlackHand Graph, I'm So Fresh On Point!!
With My Crack strand Rapz,I Bring Death On Joints..Like Arthritis..
I Can Finish a Ruckus Like Police At Bar Riot's!! This Nasa's Own
i'm The Star Piolit,Terrorist? Nah Just a Laxcadive In The Lards Diet!!
i'm Runnin Thru Them Like A Defensive Line Postin Expensive Fine's Laced Intense In Rhyme's..
Open Ya Mouth Like It's Dentist Time N i'll Send You Up Like It's My Apprentice Prime..

I'm Gunna Make The News Till Dood's Out Of Breath..
Airin Shot's Out..
That's What I..Do I'm The Best..You Get No Thrown
I'm The Superior Officer Where Eva U Try "A Rest"
How you Get New Guy From Vet? I'ma Give U Fly's A Chec
Fuck Domino..Aint One Thing you Can Do" To Get me 2 Move Like The Rest
Get Um..Get Um.. That's What They Say, I Want Dead Silence
In Dead Silence But He Remains The Laugh In My Day..
Give Um Some Fake Props With Trash In The Play, Status Disgusting
i'm Ripp Whoever Apart Like A Savage Eruptin..Somethin Volcanic
To Make Yall Panic In Every Bathroom Stall Damnit..Let The Toilets Flip
So You Can Get Dumped On By Every Boy That Sit's!!!..Menace You Get??
NO RESPECT, ya Flow is Wrecked N Blow's Like Jets you kno That Best..
You Owe ya Self Let Gooo That Rep,In The Alter You..Actin All Merry
From a Alter View..How I Expect Third degree Assault From you..
Fuck It You All Is Jews!! So Many 'Add Mires' With No Walter Cue!!..
Cheap penny Sniffin Homo..Yall aint Deepen Any Shit in This Promo
Your Gay Beyond Clay's Settle..Ur Like A Demo U Stay On The Same Level!!
I'm Huntin Crew's With Raps..N Arv Ask Plex How i Was Jay Gunnin You In Chat!!
& PETRAFYNE Fuck ya PETTY RHYME'S i'ma Put Um 2 A "Stop"..Watch Its a Steady Sign!!
Don't Cross Cause Watch is Already Mine..Let Loose With The Pendent
N I'm Bruisin ya Tendents..Snatching N Taken From These Cats Who R
Rappin N Fakin..Like Pretendin Ta Fuck.. I'ma Toast Um No Extendin A Cup..
Drop The Bitchness i Mean ya Bitches is Attendin My Nuts .. Like a School
i Don't Fight With Tool's But My Punche's is Fire Every Plunge is a Wire
Goin In N Straight Connectin..You Gunna 'Run For Anyone' This A Fake Election
Mistake's Perspection Of Dudes Who Make Progression in Creating Deception..
Yall Coil you Dood's Dont Move Up From The Bottom Flooor, Moe Just Popped Up
I'ma Popp Um More.. i Dont Got No Love 4 Yall.. All is Got Is WORE!!
In My Closit.. I'm The DevilsAngel i Sin By God's Wish, He Asked 4 Me To
Make a Deposit.. Like "Ambition i Gotta List Of Cat's U Neeeda Drain Till
Out Of Piss!! No More Lettin Out,You'll Be Dead On The Washed Up Veteran Route...
I'm a Hungry Barbian Give A Vik Some Din Like Wut Medicine About
,ya Mother in The House i'm Smotherin Her Mouth..
MARK Anthony Her Pussy Theres a Legend in Her Blouse.."
LAWGIX & GHOST i Almost Forgot you FAGS EXISTED..Wanna Compete?
U Cant Even Go On A Lap Like a Bad Kids Christmas,
FAT FUCK Quit Tryna Act Balistic..i don't Act i'm In it ..
In It Like The Eye ..My Vision's Goood..
I Vision Good But Homie Would You LIKE TO DIE?
See i Could Help You out With The Right Supply Of Knife's & Tie's
That Fit ya Neck
So when i Slice It'll Still Seem Like u Got ya Head TIGHT ON GUY!..
I'm Comin 'Right On Bi..Like Promotin Prefrence..
My Downfall Will Be The Most Anticipated Death Since..
Tupac .. Gotta Have Two Glock's I'm The Led Prince..
Metal Still Royal..Loyal..Ready To Rumble..N Spoil
Every Other Man's Puzzled, Piece .. Ready For The Tussel
U Aint in OFFICE!..Now F.A.M.E. Steady With a Shovel.. 4Real..Yall Name's is Cock ??
If U Wus Bitches U'd Put Piercins N Chain's On ya Twat
Strainin A Lot Of Clit Space..
Shit Face Git Mased & Shit faced With Out Drinkin Liq Mate,
you'll Get Raped Bananaz By Sick Ape's Who Have Sick Aid's ,
Flick Blade's Share Needle's & Tear Thru Every Rib Cage..
This Was My Duty I'm Done With This Page..
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nice fuckin read here!!


UR shit hommie!!
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$.@MB!T!0N.$ wrote:
See Plex gave You a Hand Shake.. i'ma Shake ya Hand Flick ya Cards N Laminate Ya Man ..
Plastic Divin Like Ya Handz In ya Chest..Eliminate Ya Fam.. Demanding Respect Like The Sacrid Clan..

nice opener

"Black Ya Out!!" The Door .. I Doubt Your For 'Pain..You Cn't Bear The Amount In Store!!
Lawgix Wont Get Livin Space i'll Destroy His House N More Shoutin War!!
You Got My Word Like What A Mouth Is For, Sport Your Fountain Soar..
Ass On Paper A Daily Thing!! You Won't 'Pull A Explosion' Like Israli's Strings!!
Your Nicer SCREW YOU! On No Nail Me Fling, Dood's Like A Snail He Clings..

i believe u cudda worded that better but it was still hot

I'ma "Rock Um Slim" Like Who's Joints Hailey Sing's.. Fat Fuck Need Back Up..
Get Up Back On Ya Feet Hump Back..Stat's Tough? Please Back Up,
Dead Stuck Dat Lama Increased Pump Clap's.. Hit With a Piece it's a Wrap N Not a Piece Of Some Rap
It's The Release That Spun Back The Angel That Was Pin'd On Lawgix Like THUMB TACKZ!..(BRAT! BRAT!) ..

lol@that slim reference

See The Mourge .. Tell Ghost i'll 'Pay Extra's A Visit' So He's Insured.. To Face The Same Till his Waste is Drained,
Pissed While His Face is Flamed.. I'ma Number Cat's Down Like Inmates In Chains!!
I've Bin Jason Fake.. It's Fry Day Let Me Gather Wood For Bakin's Sake!!..

eh,wasnt feelin that too much but u strung it 2gether nicely

Ghost Ghost I'ma Let Ya Roast Like I Aint a Savior You Can't Catch Me Next Ta Smoke!!
Ekom's Evolution Aint On My Level I Progress With Rope's..
Strivin 4 a Better Picture While Yall Take Acceptive Stroke's
i Stay On The Go Never Expect To Choke, Float My Boat On a Calm N Collective Note
Chillen In West Palm With Money , Blueprints..Sess N Dope..Plus a Treasure Chest Of Hope..

loved that 'stay on the go' etc,line. good shit!

My Blood's Fine..Do You Bring Pressure NOPE!..You Pig's Get Smacked With Curtin's..
Show's Over A Bag Of Perrkin's Will Help Pass The Hurtin Take ya Caff's Insertin Blade's Brink Had Fa Surfin..
The Road Of An Average Person..Who You 'Clock-in' Ur Bad Fa Workin..
U N Ghost Go Off Each Other..No PLASTIC SURGIN!!

startin to get more aggressive.

Your A Old BlackHand Graph, I'm So Fresh On Point!!
With My Crack strand Rapz,I Bring Death On Joints..Like Arthritis..
I Can Finish a Ruckus Like Police At Bar Riot's!! This Nasa's Own
i'm The Star Piolit,Terrorist? Nah Just a Laxcadive In The Lards Diet!!

flow seems better from here on out

i'm Runnin Thru Them Like A Defensive Line Postin Expensive Fine's Laced Intense In Rhyme's..
Open Ya Mouth Like It's Dentist Time N i'll Send You Up Like It's My Apprentice Prime..


i kno u cudda came harder then that
I'm Gunna Make The News Till Dood's Out Of Breath..
Airin Shot's Out..
That's What I..Do I'm The Best..You Get No Thrown
I'm The Superior Officer Where Eva U Try "A Rest"
How you Get New Guy From Vet? I'ma Give U Fly's A Chec
Fuck Domino..Aint One Thing you Can Do" To Get me 2 Move Like The Rest

'aint one thing u can do to get me 2 move like the rest'

word^

Get Um..Get Um.. That's What They Say, I Want Dead Silence
In Dead Silence But He Remains The Laugh In My Day..
Give Um Some Fake Props With Trash In The Play, Status Disgusting
i'm Ripp Whoever Apart Like A Savage Eruptin..Somethin Volcanic
To Make Yall Panic In Every Bathroom Stall Damnit..Let The Toilets Flip

dont like the last part of that very much

So You Can Get Dumped On By Every Boy That Sit's!!!..Menace You Get??
NO RESPECT, ya Flow is Wrecked N Blow's Like Jets you kno That Best..
You Owe ya Self Let Gooo That Rep,In The Alter You..Actin All Merry
From a Alter View..How I Expect Third degree Assault From you..
Fuck It You All Is Jews!! So Many 'Add Mires' With No Walter Cue!!..

lol@with no walter cue

Cheap penny Sniffin Homo..Yall aint Deepen Any Shit in This Promo
Your Gay Beyond Clay's Settle..Ur Like A Demo U Stay On The Same Level!!
I'm Huntin Crew's With Raps..N Arv Ask Plex How i Was Jay Gunnin You In Chat!!
& PETRAFYNE Fuck ya PETTY RHYME'S i'ma Put Um 2 A "Stop"..Watch Its a Steady Sign!!

ehh..i get ur point with the last part but i feel u shudda maybe worded that different,more smooth

Don't Cross Cause Watch is Already Mine..Let Loose With The Pendent
N I'm Bruisin ya Tendents..Snatching N Taken From These Cats Who R
Rappin N Fakin..Like Pretendin Ta Fuck.. I'ma Toast Um No Extendin A Cup..

nahh,first line started off good but i dont like the ending


Drop The Bitchness i Mean ya Bitches is Attendin My Nuts .. Like a School
i Don't Fight With Tool's But My Punche's is Fire Every Plunge is a Wire
Goin In N Straight Connectin..You Gunna 'Run For Anyone' This A Fake Election
Mistake's Perspection Of Dudes Who Make Progression in Creating Deception..

killin that last bar! thats what im talkin bout

Yall Coil you Dood's Dont Move Up From The Bottom Flooor, Moe Just Popped Up
I'ma Popp Um More.. i Dont Got No Love 4 Yall.. All is Got Is WORE!!
In My Closit.. I'm The DevilsAngel i Sin By God's Wish, He Asked 4 Me To
Make a Deposit.. Like "Ambition i Gotta List Of Cat's U Neeeda Drain Till
Out Of Piss!! No More Lettin Out,You'll Be Dead On The Washed Up Veteran Route...
I'm a Hungry Barbian Give A Vik Some Din Like Wut Medicine About
,ya Mother in The House i'm Smotherin Her Mouth..
MARK Anthony Her Pussy Theres a Legend in Her Blouse.."

lmao@mark anthony. didnt see that comin as i was readin along


LAWGIX & GHOST i Almost Forgot you FAGS EXISTED..Wanna Compete?
U Cant Even Go On A Lap Like a Bad Kids Christmas,
FAT FUCK Quit Tryna Act Balistic..i don't Act i'm In it ..
In It Like The Eye ..My Vision's Goood..
I Vision Good But Homie Would You LIKE TO DIE?
See i Could Help You out With The Right Supply Of Knife's & Tie's
That Fit ya Neck
So when i Slice It'll Still Seem Like u Got ya Head TIGHT ON GUY!..

feelin that for the most part

I'm Comin 'Right On Bi..Like Promotin Prefrence..
My Downfall Will Be The Most Anticipated Death Since..
Tupac .. Gotta Have Two Glock's I'm The Led Prince..
Metal Still Royal..Loyal..Ready To Rumble..N Spoil
Every Other Man's Puzzled, Piece .. Ready For The Tussel

everything after 'led prince' i think u cudda done differently,maybe completely changed it

U Aint in OFFICE!..Now F.A.M.E. Steady With a Shovel.. 4Real..Yall Name's is Cock ??
If U Wus Bitches U'd Put Piercins N Chain's On ya Twat
Strainin A Lot Of Clit Space..
Shit Face Git Mased & Shit faced With Out Drinkin Liq Mate,
you'll Get Raped Bananaz By Sick Ape's Who Have Sick Aid's ,
Flick Blade's Share Needle's & Tear Thru Every Rib Cage..
This Was My Duty I'm Done With This Page..
sick ending

ur flow seems to be kinda choppy in spots,then again i havent worked with u in'a loonggg ass time an dont remember how u used to go about shit. anyway overall its dope as fuck son. id like to hear it audio,keep droppin
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Had some nice wordplay here. The flow was pretty consistent. I think the physical structure of the verses could have been a little better, but I didn't find it difficult to read. Had some good punches throughout, looks like nobody was left unscathed from this lol. Pretty much every active member was mentioned. Good entertainment value given its length. Overall, solid drop.
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Lawgix Wont Get Livin Space i'll Destroy His House N More Shoutin War!!
You Got My Word Like What A Mouth Is For, Sport Your Fountain Soar..
Ass On Paper A Daily Thing!! You Won't 'Pull A Explosion' Like Israli's Strings!!

I only read the first paragraph but this was sick.
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Menace You Get??
NO RESPECT, ya Flow is Wrecked N Blow's Like Jets you kno That Best..



LOL..Wow you really fuked me up with that shit.
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Post by P.T.R-ins »

he fuckd you up more with :arrow:
.Let The Toilets Flip
So You Can Get Dumped On By Every Boy That Sit's!!!..

coz he showed your nature

text was dope...so,fucking,many rhymes like ice-t reborn

shit was heavy
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