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Lyrical Slaughter

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/anoth ... 13336.html


[Phasewon]
Your style is artificial, you're not even part official
It aint hard to rip you, youre finished before I start to diss you
I'll turn your squad against you; basically, facin' me,
Is like tryin' to stop a chartered missile with a starter pistol
I'll scar the tissue, when I open your flesh
Grip my fingers over your neck, and choke you to death
You aint posin' a threat, yo you makin' me laugh
I'll come break you in half, while you naked, takin' a bath!
I'll take you straight to the mat and grapple, slap you and
Snatch your Adam's apple out your asshole while ya crew is laughin' at you
My raps'll baffle and serve you, man handle and hurt you
It aint a challenge to murk you, that shit is like battlin' Urkel
Get outa my circle, you aint a worthy opponent
Verses are potent, when flowin' I'm the perfect component
The curtains are closin', son, you got done with the rest
And if the battle wasn't won, there'd be one in your chest
I'll test you physically and mentally with vivid imagery
My lyrical ability will shit on raw delivery
Flawless victory, you wanna lace the mic?
Just name your price, I'll beat you at whatever game you like
It aint just hype, I'm supposed to rip you
So you better hold your pistol, and have all your soldiers with you
I roll official like a horse and carriage
Grab a cross and ram it down your throat and jam it right across your larynx
You was tossin' salads, when you went up-state
Gettin' butt raped, and tuckin' your nuts with duct tape
For fucks sake! I'll wreck ya, make you chin check the pavement
Ride through, and pile drive you, 'til your neck is breakin'
Left you shakin' in your boots, beggin' for a truce
Danglin' from the roof, pissing yaself while you hangin' from the noose
Yous a bitch! Get your bible and use the shit
Quit rap and find God, or I'll butt fuck you with a crucifix
Who you with? It doesn't even matter, I'll leave your
People battered, bent over fetal, splattered in they fecal matter
It's either that or go head to head for the title
But my rivals show up to the battle dead on arrival

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Post by RainMan »

Another classic from Phasewon!

Perfection.

-- Sun May 31, 2009 11:23 am --

How long does it take you to write your raps?

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Props, Rain...

And it depends, I usually approach topicals different, but if it's just a raw lyrical verse like this then I'll think of a bunch of lines, and then work on sewing 'em together and patchin 'em up.

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I'll take you straight to the mat and grapple, slap you and
Snatch your Adam's apple out your asshole while ya crew is laughin' at you

^^
shit was dope man.

i liked this whole piece, overall just a skilled drop, lyrics and multis were fire, it was just sick, i give it a 9/10 just cause the flow was a lil off but it was sick any ways

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you should be afraid of all the people in the streets

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Grip my fingers over your neck, and choke you to death
You aint posin' a threat, yo you makin' me laugh
I'll come break you in half, while you naked, takin' a bath!
I'll take you straight to the mat and grapple, slap you and
Snatch your Adam's apple out your asshole while ya crew is laughin' at you

dope^
the whole thing was amazin
sorta shyt i coudl here in real life
on the streets very nice diss
dope lyrics
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Your style is artificial, you're not even part official
It aint hard to rip you, youre finished before I start to diss you
I'll turn your squad against you; basically, facin' me,
Is like tryin' to stop a chartered missile with a starter pistol
I'll scar the tissue, when I open your flesh
Grip my fingers over your neck, and choke you to death
You aint posin' a threat, yo you makin' me laugh
I'll come break you in half, while you naked, takin' a bath!
I'll take you straight to the mat and grapple, slap you and
Snatch your Adam's apple out your asshole while ya crew is laughin' at you


Nicest Part Of The Piece...
After That In My Opinion You Fell Off...

Anyway's U Spazzed On The Part I Posted..
Flow's Good..Multis Are Good.. Everythin just go's Together Nice..
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Thanks for the feed, yall. much appreciated...

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tough flows idk about haz but i liked the whole thing u remind me of the old school eminem

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This is my type of shit.
9/10
I'm not going to battle you..But I do prefer it if my prey put's up a fight.


Beneath the surface..I'm overheating your receiver circuits by unleashing Deeper verses that priests speak in churches.
What you preach is worthless, your worship defeats the purpose. Like president Obama taking bullets for the secret service
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

i gotta agree this is a classic... 9.6/10 no such thing as perfection tho
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page

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The whole thing was ill.....

drop some feed on mine..
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This was horrendous... Haha just playing. Shit was dope, as usual. Now here's a challenge for you... try to write the wackest verse ever. You have 7 days.

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I appreciate the feed, yall. It's been returned if you currently have a piece up, upping this shit one last time.

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