ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S(Mic S Wins 3-0 KO)

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ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S(Mic S Wins 3-0 KO)

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ROUND 2


TOPIC
Music is your savior. How has music affected your life?
TIME LIMIT
2 VERSES AND A HOOK. YOU DECIDE HOW YOU WANT TO UTILIZE THAT.
DUE DATE
MONDAY OCTOBER 17TH
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Re: ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S

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Re: ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S

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yeah



I wish I didn't have to write this song
but my fate is becoming clear though I've been fighting it so long
you know I truly didn't want to say goodbye
I would rather have you than all the stars in the sky
All the girls in the world, no amount of money buys
What you did for me, you're the only reason I'm alive
It was indiscreet, we were never meant to be
How could I believe that we could be together, opposites would coincide?
I heard you might be dying, and I feel it too
I hope it isn't true, but if it has to be then know that I

L-O-V-E Y-O-U and I don't know what I'd do without you and I
Keep praying for one more (year) one more (day)
(Give me one more play)

and when you're gone this song is all I'll remember
but I can always hear you beating from inside my heart
Forever...ever.....ever....ever.....

Feel like God is saying that we shouldn't be together, maybe so
But I'll fight to keep you here until the day you go
Through all the arguments, you tell me I ain't listening
Truth is, I can't hear you but I'm trying hard to listen in
And all the damage that you've done, I keep on running back
Like a glutton for Punishment, someone turn the fuckin track up
Thought I suffered from a lack of, sleep...
After the beat wrapped it up...That was a dream shatterer
As I stand, microphone inside my hand, life is lonely for a man
Who doesn't know what you've been saying, this whole time
They never had a clue, lookin back at you like "Damn, how he fuck up his own rhyme?"
I....hate to say it, but the truth is pretty soon
Fate'll take us into 2 different places and may erase us
It was you who through the pain that gave me reason to breathe
At the bleakest time, redefined the things that I thought I needed
You were by, me when my mom got caught up on the pills and attempted suicide
Now that I'm going deaf, I need you more than I needed you back then
Never could believe that it'd happen, or even in my dream could imagine
But when I got up on the floor to perform, it hit me -
I cant even hear the beat when I'm rapping
And I feel like I'm trapped in, compacted, packed in a blackened room
With every motherfucker that ever told me I'd never amount to any better is laughin
Everything I've been through passing, flashing in closed caption
Trynna get my eyes to stay shut, when everyone telling me to wake up
(No!) I don't ever wanna face the fact that they're right
Take away the rap and you're taking my life
Telling me when the last of your passion ignites
Everything around you bound to break down now
Tell me when to pull it when it's done
I won't even hear the bullet when it comes
But I'll aim so I feel it bang the drum...drum...drum

I L-O-V-E Y-O-U and I don't know what I'd do without you and I
Keep praying for one more (year) one more (day)
(Give me one more play)

and when you're gone this song is all I'll remember
but I can always hear you beating from inside my heart
Forever...ever.....ever....ever.....
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Re: ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S

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You took, My hand
Helped me cope n showed me hope
You guide, ed me
Down many roads n Helped me grow
You Saved, My Life
you never once let me go
Thank you thank you
for never letting me go(x2)


When I was in pain I'd put myself in a dark room
then put on my headphones and blare up the volume
And I could feel you connect with me in all moods
You gave me my new identity like costumes
Baby you meant everything, you were my firt true love
I heard you, felt goosebumps also felt a new rush
Like finally someone understands me, im happy
Sad lonely in pain angry all up in agony
You still took the time to understand me and i thank you
You have been faithful yet everday i play you
Show me a breakthrough cuz baby im what makes you
And I know we connect cuz your there when i change you
If you don't change i replay you cuz you make me
I know it sounds crazy, but your the one that saved me
you say the right words daily and led me down a straight road
And i'm not talking about a woman, im talking about a radio!!!

You took, My hand
Helped me cope n showed me hope
You guide, ed me
Down many roads n Helped me grow
You Saved, My Life
you never once let me go
Thank you thank you
for never letting me go(x2)


Yeah it was the music that saved me as a kid
I grasped on a mic, spillin my pain and my sin
Stayed Home and wrote while others kicked jokes
flipped dope, nd i did it to but the music hit home
yeah it hit home, I just new i hadda change
It was music or my mama weeping at my grave
So the music played n I wrote out my pain
Wrote out my sins - wrote to stay out the game
I wrote what i thought, spoke what i loved
All my emotions came out from me growing up
The beats held me up even when the goins tough
I look back at my life I'm so glad i gave it up
I could be dead on the streets or eatin jail meat
Instead The music curved that road and made a new me
A new destinee of all the bad memories
And everytime i grief, i just put on a beat


You took, My hand
Helped me cope n showed me hope
You guide, ed me
Down many roads n Helped me grow
You Saved, My Life
you never once let me go
Thank you thank you
for never letting me go(x2)
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Re: ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S

Post by Defiance »

yo ima give it too Mic S

reason..

i just felt his was more of a direct song about the subject content i.e he talked about it. and his chorus was good had me bobbing my head.. liked his song alot actually

while leeroi took more of a indirect path, wasnt feeling his chorus at all.. kinda a strange song.. but unique which is a good thing liked the change up of slow to fast. just didnt bring it home for me


flow- tie (both brought equally good rhythm)
-enjoyment- Mic s
-Subject content- mic s
-depth- tie


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Re: ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S

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appreciate the feed
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Re: ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S

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Leeroy...
Beats got alot of Soul..Quality is not that good...verse starts pretty Good..but the hook sounds like it needs some help... I kinda liked the flo tbh it was wierd at points but mostly on coo bruh..wait okay the start of the hook is a lil off imo..and the second half of da hook sounds like its got too much Sumthin on it..



Mic-S..
Well Quality out the gate is above Leeroy's ..well Mic-S just has a more Sure flo more on point..i was feelin the deliv especially in the Second Verse you held ya swag a lil better..ya held the concept so nice ...i enjoyed the hook also it was pretty nice bro..


well
Flo-Mic...was just on point more than Leeroy..Lee's flo was trippy and enjoyable at times..but became a bit much for me @ the end ..
Deliv-tie...Both seemed to do alright here
Presence-Mic...by a lil
Concept-Tie ..i think they both stayed on Concept.
Impact-Tie...both did aight
Enjoyment-Mic S..song just flowed a lil better beside the Quality issue, i also liked Mic's hook better cuz of the way it flowed...i think Leeroy wouldve been able to get MY vote if the hook was a lil better..cuz he had deeper Lyrics..but its hard to listen to everything if you arent enjoying the sound of it all..


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Re: ATT ROUND 2: LEEROY VS. MIC S

Post by Loon E Lou »

Well, first of all, thank you both for showing. fuckin ay, for real guys, thanks.

Now,

Leeroy: Definately a nice beat selection. your verses started off slow, but then ended with a bang. i liked the switchup in the flows and how you speeded it up at the end. definately my type of flow. ALTHOUGH, some of it didnt seem on point as you usually are. The hook, no. I wasnt feelin it. just didnt vibe with the verses. So i think this killed you overall.

Mic S: NICE TRACK MAN! you had a nice solid delivery throughout your whole verse. No falling off from what i could hear. your hook wasnt too crazy, but alot easier to listen to compared to leeroys. Beat i wasnt to amped about, but, you did well with it.

nice job guys!


mvgt MIC S

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