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(I can't do 100 bars, are you nuts?)

yo, yo, I hate MCs with the worse flows, thats why I have diverse foes
I chose the path to being righteous it was nothing BUT a dirt road
I hurt pros, the beef comes to a head with first blows
Controversial, smack the shit out of ur mom, and say its nothing personal
work the ho, fuck commercial tracks, I run over entertainers
when it comes to mainstream rap, i have a chip on my shoulder like painters
stop judging my spit just because your insecure being ugly as shit
you couldn't erect yourself with all the blood in my dick
fuck a fight, you don't have that luck tonight, bite the dust like mites
ur desire to be me, will have u spontaneously combust on sight
let's get back to the initial theme, how you set unrealistic dreams
its like your outcome is weighed with a rigged triple beam
understand I'm great, I don't give a flying fuck if you text flows
I'm special, I'd like to see my art officially be recognized like UFOS
as long as my vessels flowing, I'll affect the moment
keeping your ego in check like the best chess opponent
fuck the notion, I bring too much emotion, critics are fast to front
who cares, pass the blunt, my moment in the sun, usually lasts a month
I get all the cash I want, i'll leave you broke, when I smash you chumps
using brass to punch, faggot ur like a northeastern storm with ur massive front
fast to stump these faggots, who can't write, what I did in seconds
with progression, I institute my 1st draft, like rhyming civic lessons
rip the session, I have a quick wit with this aggression
I think on my feet like a gymnastic teacher bent over doing trivia questions
I guess its destiny, I will forever be the best emcee, unless its a necessity
for me to stop, I'm like a clock, nobody is second guessing me
battling me is a recipe for disaster, most of my opponents honor the method
its rare if my personas affected, if it is you will be a goner in seconds
you don't want beef with me, I literally have drama perfected
and I've seen it all, physically, for god sakes, Obama's elected
I've been lured like jesus, by everybody I know, to record my pieces
cuz I'm like a 12 inch cock, I'm known to perform the deepest
I was born conceited, since conceded, in hip hop I was more than needed
I sure succeeded, I never was treated like an aborted fetus
I sport adidas, nike, sweet kicks, lyrically you have nothing to offer
suffer the slaughter, u couldn't fill my shoes with a bucket of water
trust me, I'm hotter, in every sense of the word, ur meant to be served
u should go to guinness world records with ur attempt to be heard
nobody is as wack as my enemies, I laugh at their energy
u can get DNA from my tongue, you'll never able to match my intensity
I'm an assassin to MTV, the way I'm attacking them mentally
I'll never lack an identity, I'm like a password, you have to remember me
i'm trapped in the back of your memory, causing mind numbness
you rhyme dumbness, stealing all ur lines, and still can't find my punches
go ahead and judge this, i'm as dope as it gets, I don't need no connect
its like I got u a motherfucking savings account, the way I put ur ego in check
I'm lethal to vets, as deep as it gets, simply put, but still keep it complex
I will lead to ur death, check it, even the best are not perceived as a threat
I'm going bonkers, my rhyme scheme is a city, and my flows a monster
oh, ur not sure?, I don't need to reply, because I am known to concur
I'll leave you froze in ur skin, I have tons of ammunition, I'm holding it in
when we come to blows like the wind, you'll get exposed like a limb
see, I'm the most hard, leave all my foes scarred like no holds bar
instrumental like mozart, plus I have you hooked, must be the coast guard
when I'm about to rhyme, I don't think, out of sight, I think out my mind
I'm like the galaxy, you can wonder how I got here, you can't doubt my shine
in a black hole, I'd be timeless still, this is talent, combined with skill
u could be on your death bed writing poetry and not be able to rhyme this ill
i'm lyrically rich, i'll never divide the wealth, I lie in stealth
when I rap bad, I need to cut my body in half, I'm that much beside myself
live as well, you will fry in hell, crying help, strangle you with the bible belt
rip open ur stomach, cuz thats the only way you will able to see inside yourself
laughing at ur sliding health, I don't do audio, because I would probably melt mics
ur a faggot that I use to help write, at the morgue is the only place u will have a shelf life
breathe in from the end of a tail pipe, you already failed life, get your facts right
you don't rap nice with ur fast type, ur the one hit wonder like a crack pipe
I can't be duplicated, battle me, and ur life is tossed, i'm the type to drop
so fucking dope, I might not stop, u represent crews of fiction just like a cross
I knew it was over, my futuristic thoughts throw psychics off, I'll take my rightful spot
as the only emcee who doesn't write a lot and still excites hip hop
its nice to watch, whether ur nice or not, a decent rapper or just like to talk
my writers block is taxes, I just write it off, like the books of indicted cops
thats not a slight at Ross, but thats the cost to be the boss, I never lost sight
fuck I never lost fights, hip hop annoys like loud exhaust pipes, so I rock mics
from top heights, playing Pac at stop lights, all eyes on me, oh the irony
when you try to be gaining notoriety, I know black music like there is no society
I dare to say, nobody knows the poet inside of me, how I flow with variety
I'm so good, its a growing anxiety, I know these emotions so well, I should go in psychiatry
thanks to all those who inspired me, before I retire myself from the fires of hell
that this enviroment sells, I have something I'm dying to tell
a message I am trying to shell, ur better than you think, don't lie to yourself
ur compromising ur health, critics don't know shit, their not even applying themselves
as for replying to beef, you need to ur keep eyes in the street, its surprising to me
how many people want to die when their weak, I want to survive like a beast
fuck, crying to sleep, I want my dreams to be as big as possible, if
I can rig the obstacles quick, I'll get more gigs than ur favorite optical disks
the point is not to be rich, its to love hip hop, plus you got to be sick
don't copy the shit, and be sloppy with it, only submit demos when ur qualities fixed
A & R's are obviously dicks, you will still get a chance, you will probably be nixed
MC's are logically picked, its marketing, thats why ur plan needs to be properly pitched
learn the business, like you were turned religious, thats how you will earn ur digits
burn your shit list, cuz every MC can return with sickness
act like you ain't concerned with disses, battle on ur own terms, be judicious
but don't be too vicious, cuz it will make you suspicious, like who's this, in music
choose a niche and use it, switch to new shit and u will shift ur movement
be ready to risk improvement, if you have competition then listen to it
keep spitting fluid until your lips are blue, and your mouth is numb
thats what the south has done, nobody really gives a fuck about ur gun
if you want money that u can count for fun, then dedication is key, the education is free
cuz I dont want any of you ending up in the same destination as me
waiting to be, I'd rather be chasing a dream, the player making the team
while some want to be on the bleachers, trying to get their face in the scene
I let my talent go to waste like it was placed in the sea, sensationally
I was never appreciated by the casual fan, BUT I was great to emcees
With my punchlines, I jumped minds, especially with my wordplay
though at times, I used it in a reserved way, per say, I just let my words play
my rhyme schemes were dope, I don't need to gloat, but I'd get jesus vote
cuz its like cancer, you see the growth in every fucking piece I wrote
at times a conscience rapper, that was a constant factor, I'd even battle rap
iller punches than the average track, my wins kept mountain like saddleback
I set the bar, who thought I'd get this far, surprised, I'll bet you are
athletes don't sweat this hard, I need this credit, I'm a fucking debit card
I've sparred with greats, scarred my face, this is the last time that I grab the culture
I went from shit, and you got to admit, i'm up to par like an average golfer
when this is rap is over, don't approach me, asking for change
telling me to come back in the game, I've had my blast, don't take my absence in vain
I'll never look at rapping the same, but I'll still complex, even after my flame
has died out and their scratching my name, off the record books the last that I claim
rap is arcane, MC's will be attacking my fame, I know its fantastically lame
but even when I am drastically changed, I'm still an ill artist cuz the classics remain
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Post by TreTru »

AAHHHH damn this thing is long...hahaha

so far it's pretty good..it seems almost audio style in places..
i need to read it all then i'll feed it completely....


n a black hole, I'd be timeless still, this is talent, combined with skill
u could be on your death bed writing poetry and not be able to rhyme this ill
i'm lyrically rich, i'll never divide the wealth, I lie in stealth
when I rap bad, I need to cut my body in half, I'm that much beside myself



^^^^shiyt dude i only got this far ..but i need to chief up
and finish this..

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Post by complexity »

Thanks for the feed, I will return the favor for anyone who is willing to read my book. 8)

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aight im ready to finish..i guess you had to make up for lost time..huh?

started off strong with the multis and scheme ..pretty sik. lotsa sims..

then at UFO was the only thing that stood out..not bad but it stood out..
w/e 2 bars out of a hundred..multies connectin the rest was tight


the point is not to be rich, its to love hip hop, plus you got to be sick
don't copy the shit, and be sloppy with it, only submit demos when ur qualities fixed
A & R's are obviously dicks, you will still get a chance, you will probably be nixed
MC's are logically picked, its marketing, thats why ur plan needs to be properly pitched
learn the business, like you were turned religious, thats how you will earn ur digits
burn your shit list, cuz every MC can return with sickness
act like you ain't concerned with disses, battle on ur own terms, be judicious
but don't be too vicious, cuz it will make you suspicious, like who's this, in music
choose a niche and use it, switch to new shit and u will shift ur movement
be ready to risk improvement, if you have competition then listen to it
keep spitting fluid until your lips are blue, and your mouth is numb

^^ ay yo i was feelin this part alot..schoolin'em ..preachin the word right
there...rhymescheme and multi's are alright..but the substance of the message is clear..thats the game 101..



ur compromising ur health, critics don't know shit, their not even applying themselves
as for replying to beef, you need to ur keep eyes in the street, its surprising to me
^^^i like the way this transfered,real smooth..people dont do it enough..


all in all better then any of my drops here..mos def..RESPECT....


whew..okay my songs are in the chamber..complex..haha

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I'll give this piece the thought out feed that it deserves when i can.

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Post by Haz »

Dope.
Dropped a Hundred Bars ..
At First It Just Seemed Like You Were Attacking People...
Multi's Were On Point, Some Basic Punches But the Way
They Were Strung Into The Piece Was Dope As Hell...
Multis Kept Flowing Consistently... At Some Points The Substance Was Up Like Crazy.. In Other Part's The Piece A Lil Dull, Cause It Seemed Like You Were just Waitin TO Explode... Deff Went Out With a Big Bang.. Durin The Endin I Think It Was Dope How You Were Givin Your Advice To Become a M-c...


using brass to punch, faggot ur like a northeastern storm with ur massive front

Liked That ..

In Some Part's Some of The Things you Said Got Repetitive..But This Was a 100 Bar Drop... So I Don't Blame It N I Doubt U Could Remember What Plays you Used 12 Bars Before....

Flow Was Hott, Some Transitions Were Made Better Then Others...



Overall This Piece Went Out With a Bang... Deff Liked It ... Liked The Endin The Most... Begginin Was Tight 2 ... I Guess Ur Retirin 2 .. 2 Bad... '
Don't Feed The Piece i Got Up Right Now .. It's Like 3 Bars...

Anyways .. Good Shit..
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Post by The Gonz »

This was nice. The flow was spot on throughout, which is really important in a piece this long. Multies were abundant throughout but not overdone or over emphasized. I like the rhymeschemes and your transition to different topics, very smooth. Some good messages hidden in this piece as well. Would make an excellent audio. Mad nice.

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Takes a talented person to drop a Hundred bars with consistency.
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Post by complexity »

-.HaZarD.- wrote:Takes a talented person to drop a Hundred bars with consistency.
118 :lol:

Tretru, what didn't you like about the UFO line, I'm just trying to figure it out.

Hazard, I appreciate the feedback, I hope that all the punches weren't basic, that surely wasn't my goal.

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Post by Phenom »

Incredible drop, complexity. I'm inspired to drop my own 100 bars now.Or Maybe ill do 50…100's overwhelming for me just thinking about it
Like Hazard said 100 bars of consistent flow is something few writers can do.


“let's get back to the initial theme, how you set unrealistic dreams
its like your outcome is weighed with a rigged triple beamâ€
I'm not going to battle you..But I do prefer it if my prey put's up a fight.


Beneath the surface..I'm overheating your receiver circuits by unleashing Deeper verses that priests speak in churches.
What you preach is worthless, your worship defeats the purpose. Like president Obama taking bullets for the secret service
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Post by Cee4 »

dope. far too long but dope.

like the way the piece changed direction. it started off as a kinda punchline piece. punchlines which were good. your definitly one of the most under rated when it comes to punchlines probably because they just fit into the verse and are not over emphasised..im sure u even said that at some point in the verse.

i have a chip on my shoulder like painters

you couldn't erect yourself with all the blood in my dick

faggot ur like a northeastern storm with ur massive front


you also have the ability to put things across in an intersting and original way

I sport adidas, nike, sweet kicks, lyrically you have nothing to offer
suffer the slaughter, u couldn't fill my shoes with a bucket of water
^^^^
i liked this bar for some reason lol


then you went more into the message of the verse. too be honest i wasnt a fan of the lecture about the record industry, A&R`s..etc the section was well written but i just felt it dosent really apply to anyone who will read it. i cant see anyone on here making it but i guess you never know lol

then you went into the whole legacy and retirement hinting.

I set the bar, who thought I'd get this far, surprised, I'll bet you are
athletes don't sweat this hard, I need this credit, I'm a fucking debit card
I've sparred with greats, scarred my face, this is the last time that I grab the culture
I went from shit, and you got to admit, i'm up to par like an average golfer
when this is rap is over, don't approach me, asking for change
telling me to come back in the game, I've had my blast, don't take my absence in vain
I'll never look at rapping the same, but I'll still complex, even after my flame
has died out and their scratching my name, off the record books the last that I claim
rap is arcane, MC's will be attacking my fame, I know its fantastically lame
but even when I am drastically changed, I'll still an ill artist cuz the classics remain
^^^^
dope. even though i dont think we`ve seen the last verse from you.

but if it is your last piece you definitly went out with a bang
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Post by complexity »

Thanks C4.

It shows a lot of respect for all of these people to leave me feedback on what is an overwhelming amount of bars.

I kept trying to end it, then wanted to add more, because to capture all of the subjects that I touched on as an MC over the years while not literally making it a 118 bar story was a bit difficult and took a lot of content.

I really appreciate the feedback. I am going to try to give more feedback in the future.

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ayy naw i didnt not like it..i just read shyt with a rythm when i peep
em out..with most pieces i have to double take to feel the writers flo.
but not with your's the whole thing thing was so fluent to me..that the
single syll rhyme you did there changed up the rythm a lil..thats the
only spot where i had to dbl take so i pointed it out...pls dont get me
wrong i personally would be splittin my wig to do a freakin 30 bar
consistent but i wanted to give ya real feed so you know i actually read
the whole thing...haha ..but yeah def a dope drop..

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Post by Haz »

i personally would be splittin my wig to do a freakin 30 bar
consistent

Your Gunna love my suprise then ..
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Post by Mrz.Git Bad! »

im deff. feelin this, holy shit its long, but its a damn good read, its a good and straight up message, sounds like it could be an audio,, ,keep it up my dude, id love to see more from you
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