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PeyotePearl
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Hell and back/Unmatched

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Tell me what you think. Which do you like better?
Hell and back
Chorus:
Yo, I wonder where did it all start
The day when I got all caught up in the dark
Spitting rhymes and waitin' for signs in a pitch black night
Hoping to God that I wouldn't have to give up the fight

Verse 1:
Been to hell and back you wouldn't believe
The things I've done or the things I've seen
The shit that got me to the place where I am today
The shit that made me just fuckin' fade away
I've been through more than you could ever imagine my biggest fear is fear itself
The kind that wraps around your throat and leaves you chokin' for help
Viscuous like honey it clogs the arteries
Leaves you gasping for air it's like you just lost the lottery

Yo, I wonder where did it all start
The day when I got all caught up in the dark
Spitting rhymes and waitin' for signs in a pitch black night
Hoping to God that I wouldn't have to give up the fight

Verse 2:
I'm tired of tryin'/ tired of dyin'/ but when everything looks like it's gonna come to an end
That's when I start to bitch with a pen
You know what it's like to wake up feeling the same every day?
Shit, I had to wake up for that 3-6-5
Pull on a plaid shirt and jeans and get ready for the same old lies
Swallow that pink pill you'll be alright it's just lithium yeah, it'll help you get through this fight
Is what they told me/ and so I took the pill and life stood still
It was like living in a lucid dream you can make shit happen but it's never what it seems

Yo, I wonder where did it all start
The day when I got all caught up in the dark
Spitting rhymes and waitin' for signs in a pitch black night
Hoping to God that I wouldn't have to give up the fight

Verse 3:
If you were told this is the cure what would you do?
Would you take those meds after all you'd been through?
This is what I told myself to do and to get it all over with I took an overdose
Left me barely sane at most
Couldn't meet anyone's eyes trust me I tried and I tried
I lied and I lied
But when I stopped taking pills it only got worse
Left me trying to surf


Yo, I wonder where did it all start
The day when I got all caught up in the dark
Spitting rhymes and waitin' for signs in a pitch black night
Hoping to God that I wouldn't have to give up the fight

Verse 4:
Wave after wave of paranoia
I let it get the best of me while I toy'd with ya
Twisted my mind was and twisted it remains
You think that you were the only one who made me insane?
Nah, it wasn't your fault it never was
I remember yelling at you just because
My mental capacity lacked in alacrity
Life became a living hell
It got so bad I swore to the devil my soul I'd sell


Yo, I wonder where did it all start
The day when I got all caught up in the dark
Spitting rhymes and waitin' for signs in a pitch black night
Hoping to God that I wouldn't have to give up the fight

Verse 5:
If only shit would get better and it finally did
After I'd run out shit to bid
When I had nothing left and no one to turn to
I realized the only person who could save me was myself
And here I am telling my story
It's not one that's filled with glory
It doesn't end with a happily ever after
It's not some fairytale
But I'm not going to just give up and fail
I never have and never will
The devil can take my soul but he can't take my spirit
Been lost and been betrayed
Almost gave in when my hopes became frayed
But let me tell you right now
Even when you feel like giving up, don't, no matter when no matter how
Don't let the voices in your head drown you out
You've been to hell and back but who the hell would believe?
Yeah, I do, I do 'cause I've been there.

[soundcloud]http://soundcloud.com/peyotepearl/hell-and-back[/soundcloud]

unmatched

Yeah so, I can't think of shitty to say shittt here I go
I'm unmatched you can't set me on fire
I light my own match and take myself higher
Bright orange flame this is the beginning of the game
Copycat you, don't rap your lyrics the same
Pearl fuckin' Pielsticker you can't tame
I'm like a mustang nah not the kind that goes vroom
I'll trample ya while we're in the same room
Homie you're all talk and no action
I want some kind of dissin' reaction
I can't stop I'm on a roll
My words are like red hot coals
They'll burn you if you try and touch 'em
Third degree yeah and it's getting' worse
Have they started to blister cause you're fuckin' on my turf?
I'm like lightning I can strike anywhere take me on if you dare
It's like spin the bottle all over again
Truth or dare?
It's up to you. But you better not let lies fuckin' spew
Your lips are tainted and your rhymes are painted
Black and white, while mine have color don't stop the fight
Now you're tryin to run haha
I've got you wrapped around my finger
Take you through the fuckin' ringer
Choke you with a viola string around your neck
No I won't give you one more sec
I said earlier that I'd trample ya well how would you feel if I sampled ya?
I'm takin' a bite Hannibal Lecter style
I'm on the FBI's most wanted file
Got them coming after me but I'ma finish this rap before I leave
I'm smokin' in more ways than one
Cherry prime times in my favor
What do you have that you'll savor
By the end of this you won't be missed
Of that I can assure,
You're broken, you're battered, your beat
And you're about to admit defeat
You're dealt the hand that you can't fold
You'll never make it to the top is what you're told.
Look at you, standing there thinking that you didn't have a care
Until I came along and ripped you up
Licked the blade of my knife now that's what's up
Blood on the blade your fate is made
Now if you'll excuse me, I'll take my bow
While roses are flung at me from the crowd.

[soundcloud]http://soundcloud.com/peyotepearl/unmatched[/soundcloud]
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Re: Hell and back/Unmatched

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i give props that you can write a lot in a short time, the lyrics are ok but you keep busting out more tracks but i wana hear your delivery improve. the flow needs to be cleaned up, the verse needs to be cleaned up. too many words, learn how you can drag/pronounce certain words differently to fit the beat better. dont force your words to the beat so much.... parts like:

Spitting rhymes and waitin' for signs in a pitch black night

the "spittin rhymes and waiting" was good but the "for signs in a pitch black night" that right there is 7 syllables for all those words. normally try to shoot around for... 7-15 syllables IN A SINGLE LINE. try constructing your verse differently so your not trying to KEEP uP with the beat but you and the beat coincide efficiently. you can do a lot better i can hear it, within id say a years time youre going to be a well developed rapper and its good that you started this early on audios cuz by the time your my age doing tracks youll be good as hell
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Re: Hell and back/Unmatched

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Thanks for the feed bro and aight yeah I don't plan on posting anything else until my flow and delivery get better.
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Re: Hell and back/Unmatched

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You recorded this on the mac didn't you? it sounds a lot better.
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Re: Hell and back/Unmatched

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Right? I still need real recording equipment!
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