She loves me she loves me not

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PeyotePearl
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She loves me she loves me not

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Tried to flow to the beat instead of forcing my words to fit it.

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this sounded a little better to me but be careful on your pausing for too long cuz it can throw the vibe off.
just keep working on it.


this here is my home-girl from way back when. check her flow out
and see if you can see what im talking about.

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Yeah I like her flow. Pausing is alright now and then but I agree pausing too often can stop the flow instead of keep it going. Thanks for the feed. I'll keep working on it.
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"Took it forever away" ... doesn't fit ... and becomes inaudible

Man ... I gotta say though ... you really rip your guts out when you write ... you've got that passion ... Got some real pain there ... I feel the emotion ... it takes courage to be vunerable, the best artists do it, and you've got that figured ... now you just gotta keep at it .. and don't just look to us for criticism ... at the end of the day ... your harshest critic needs to be yourself ... nit pick ... and always always do as many takes as you have the energy for ... take time out to listen to em like your a stranger ... what works ... what doesn't ...

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A female MC, finally! The lyrics are really good. Whenever you are serious with bringing personal elements to a song, that's a strong move. Good!

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Post by M33Kish »

yo, once you get comfy on the mic your gonna have a really nice voice, try evening out your pitches and whatnot and itll all come together and you wont try and force syllables into your bars. good job though how long you been at this?
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I've been at it pretty much since I turned 17
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

pretty good then considering the time frame
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