Coleon - Messagin' a Bottle *Will Return Feed*

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Coleon - Messagin' a Bottle *Will Return Feed*

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Re: Coleon - Messagin' a Bottle *Will Return Feed*

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Great flow i like this man
Cool topic good multi's beats real nice
I wuld of liked the beat to fade out at the end though.
Dnt really like how it just ended like that.

All in all i giv this 8/10 bro stay up!

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-- Fri Jul 01, 2011 10:24 am --

Great flow i like this man
Cool topic good multi's beats real nice
I wuld of liked the beat to fade out at the end though.
Dnt really like how it just ended like that.

All in all i giv this 8/10 bro stay up!

Feed this if u can :)
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/just- ... 22504.html
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Re: Coleon - Messagin' a Bottle *Will Return Feed*

Post by Alvin »

Maaan, the topic and the way you delivered it was fucking dope man. The rhyme scheme is pretty dope, Quality aint bad, I'd bump it, beat has a nice melody to it. But hands down the ending and overall story is prolly the best part. Something I have noticed about you though, you seem to always just post half songs, or a single verse, whats that about?
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Re: Coleon - Messagin' a Bottle *Will Return Feed*

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I just feel like I improve quicker if I go a little at a time. Some people start out and release whole tapes with the same thing wrong on it. I love writing and I write a lot but unless it's a story, it's rarely an entire song. I try to save hard verses for collabs and my best material for when I've reached my potential.
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Post by TreTru »

hmm well quality deliv and shit are all on..i was feelin most of what you were sayin..flo and shits cool too..i liked the story concept and shit so overall it's dope bro..def could've been longer tho..but i like the whole you tube thing ...good shit..1
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