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This one is called first Rule ..The beats more advanced than the last joint.
my partner Petrafyne made this beat on reason 3.0.

songs pretty self explanatory. I kinda played around with my side of the concept though..I'm on the HOOK and verse 1,...2nd verse is Petrafyne




aaiight get@me



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Post by Brah-Vo »

Yoo!
I was feelin this bruh.
Hook was addictive
Tell you whyyyyy
i was deffo feelin this.
Verses were alright .. I mean nothing spectacvular
But it was an enjoyable listen.
Props.
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Post by Viral »

i was feelin this shit even more than the last track...shits dope man..def like this..da hooks dope..haha...dont get high off ur own supply..wreckless..haha..ur flow on da first verse was tight...seems like somethin id hear on da radio...dude on da 2nd verse is pretty good too..only complaint i really have is the mixing..it could be better...like da dubs n wat not..seem to loud here n there...but otherwise its fire...keep doin u man...mad props
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Post by precise »

lol scarface reference, dope

loved the track, u sound sorta like a better version of j-kwon
nice catchy hook, good flow, good song concept

overall, great shit dude
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Ay yo right much respect mayne..thanks lot dawg..
I'll return the feed too...peace .


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Post by - Mutual - »

man i liked the harmonised shit
it was dope altogether as a track
the lyrics may not have been sumin special
but they rocked the beat with fire to em
the chorus was dope completely catchy an feelin it
so great job dude i hope we can collab at sum point
great listen hope u return the feed n keep'em comin
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Post by TreTru »

thanks alot for the feed guy's really appreciate it..will return the favor..
and Mutual juss keep doin what your doin and we'll colab eventually..
with the way you'r elevating it sholdn't take too long..


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Post by Miilz »

Nice Track ..Aint Leavin Feedback ..But i Liked The Song, Beat Was Nice, And u Had a Good Flow. It Was Better Then Ya Last Track, We Must All Admit ..Anyways Keep On Dropping Son ..
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Post by Miilz »

But Yo Friend Can Make Some Nice Beats! Wasn't The Best But it Was Done Nice With ya Work You've Done.
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thanks mayne ..were still workin to up our level ..
so right on mayne..
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Post by Haz »

On Some Real Shit,
This is The Nicest song i've Heard posted in The Creation chambers In a While.

The Song was Dope, Liekd What you did With The Hook I got Alot of songs
Written out .. That I Do That With..

You Max B soundin Nigga , ya Flow Was Bananaz
I Mean ya Lyrical Content Wasnt Crazy , But The Shit Came Out Fire.

We Deff Gunna get a Collab goin Soon.
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Post by TreTru »

let me know on the real...4 sure dawg I'm down..
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Post by Young K »

hook was good, flow was the strong point, i wouldn't be surprised if you got some radio plays if the right person heard this, it fits in with the industry music nowadays, keep doing you...
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Post by TreTru »

ayo good lookin out kid...appreciate da feed..yeah this is gonna go on
da radio when da album drops...in '09...


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Post by HKX »

yo I gotta agree wit Viral on dis one da mixin is aight at least u got ur shit down tho dawg and still like ur 1st track tho i like dat deep shit but dis i could bump 2 in da car and i don't say dat bout niggaz i don't kno i'm 4 real keep droppin nigga
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