I feel it I feel it.. I think that you should find a beat to spit your bars to. It'll help ease out your flow. Even though it might not be that noticeable, rapping without a beat does go somewhat off-tempo and having a rhythm in the background can be a major help. Try to stay consistent and link ...

Not bad for a start man, you gotta work on consistency in yours bars though. Find a topic and stick to it. There's plenty you've got to learn, but for now just try workin on perfecting your flow and staying consistent, because those are important elements.. keep doin your thing

Dope bars man.. I'm feelin it, you connected all of your bars nicely and never astrayed from the topic for the most part and the multis were decent. A lot of the imagery I'm taking in from this is abstract. It's fine to have abstractness in art. In my opinion you could go deeper into the meaning of ...

Dope verse, I see the sort-of abstract multi-packed pattern in this post and it works well to convey your message.. there was a lot of gruesome lines that made me both go like "oh wow" and some of them that had me laughin rofl

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Gotcha man. Was lookin' for the rules in the section and didn't see em, but I'm not surprised about this.. will feed some posts shortly

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