Thanks Haz, I understand what you're saying, as I said it's just a rough draft and it's actually my first song I recorded. I'll try to work on the rhymes alot to. But really this feedback means everything to me keep it coming, I'll try to post something else soon and I hope to correct some stuff ...

I'd also suggest turning the strings down a little, but this is somethin I'd bump to. It kinda sounds like something Drake would use

I started snapping to it haha, it sounds good but what kind of genre are you trying to fit it into?

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I like it, but if you're gonna make a deep song like this, you could drop a little more emotion into it. Let people know how you feel.

I like it, it has that J. Cole kinda spin on it. But I agree that you should use she less, you could give her a name maybe.

I recorded this on a laptop mic in Audacity, and edited it myself. It's just a rough draft but I'd love some feedback so I can fine tune the finished version.