that beat is nice and the flows where on point i like the hateful/dark sound to it.. raw shit.. yall are def. doing your thing

piss

vinnie paz- razorblade salvation... what yall know about that vinnie paz

that was ill man i like it flowed nice and i liked the rhyme scheme. not really anything to fix up from what i see

one of those days so heres a freewrite its a little messy cause i just wrote and never went back just let it all go

another night grippin the knife wishing tonight could be the night i finnally end my life// bites of kryptonite the mirror is only hatrid in my sights//so i grab the knife i dim the ...

the flow is to the beat besides a couple forced rhymes in the second verse but i was still feeling it very good drop.

the flow was great man and the story def was told not that i needed to know about your mornings ha. but def rating that 10/10 man didnt hear anything that wasnt on point or off flow.

river

punches

thanks for the feed back, and yeah i know what your saying im still getting the hang of this site so ill slowly become more active.

-- Sat Nov 19, 2011 12:00 am --

thanks for the feed back, and yeah i know what your saying im still getting the hang of this site so ill slowly become more active.

trying to get some of my things out there so heres a fresh freewrite for you tell me what you think. sorry about the spelling it isnt my strong point.

envy fuels the nonsence thru false contexts//
shits preplex and we make it more complex//
screaming and throwing objects//
mind is fulla shit but ...

thanks for the feedback and the welcome

stay-forever-clever decypher and sever-letters//
pray-for better-weather and never say never//

my mind stays sky high,
half blind cant see out my damn eyes,
got me chinky lookin slanted vison why lie,
get the blunt again and im still hittin i feel fine,
4 blunts and a big bowl pack now im feelin nice,
laughin at the sound of reality gigglin at life,

i felt the pain but invisoned happiness
still felt the same so i went to the cabinets
popped the top of the bottle to stop the madness
swallowed every last one and collapsed to the matress
i had troubles and struggles i felt the sadness
now im grinnin and chilling as i slip to the blackness