lmfao no the story;'s not about me lol i heard the original song
and the guy would throw in random story topics about people
and there problems lmfao i just followed along with the concept xD

[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gaVMrKOR_KA[/video]

[start at 2:24](i did third verse)
-as a young teenager you know he was pheening hope/
-wanted to remove the pain so he relied on weed and coke/
-he just had a recent goal twisting it till he would choke/
-isolate him self from pain now he ...

damn this is a nice piece man
you did good with the vocabulary
rhyme structure is nice and it flowed really well
i like your opener most openers don't catch my attention
you had me interested in reading what the next few lines were
this is really nice man good shit vocab is killer
"I turn to this ...

im trying to compare votes
from my16 compared to this site

[LIL JAY’S VERSE]
karma hes a male model, for pervs weakly,in ever pic he gets fondled sneakily,
little weakling battling me what a shame, keep bringing my name up no fucking loyalty,
you act like a hyper midget on cocaine,i didnt think drag queens were considered royalty,
ill export this short ...

good shit pyro

nice drop multis on point
and the flow was there killed it with the
vocab too

<t>-fucking with karma? you must be really into beastiality/<br/>
-its like you ran into my words on accident the way im speaking tragically/<br/>
-im dropping knowledge on you that have you leaking sadly g/<br/>
-and i know im the shit have you sniffing like an allergy/<br/>
-you spit fire? i'll ...