nice and sloppy

one word: WOW!!!!
this was real good. when i started i didn't know what to say about it , but as i kept reading it i felt like i was reading a story .it sounds like poetry in some way, it was like a climax of words that erupted from the page. so all i gotta say is that was fire and you set it a blaze.

lifes a bitch wit a price/
that'll fuck you in all holes
without thinkin it twice ,
i agree with you on that , and this was a good read.

i like this line best bro "a living symphony playing out the tune of life"
i wish i would of though of first.
but any way you got talent yo.just keep doing what your doing

its straight but just try using multies bro,this sounds to simple.
but keep it up tho.

dude do you like have a dictionary for a brain the vocab and flow is like your screen name (monumental).your lyrical skills are awsome, bro you need to make a mixtape or something.
i feel inferior for real man. i cant write something like that on my best days.

I’m mentaly disturbed cut a line threw the symetry of words.
I mean the similarity and the mimicrys upsurd.
The barsz are bizzars.I keep jarsz ofem raw.
Buy far you have yet to anyalyze or come up with a suggestion. What kind of of infection I am. I’m sick as an arm with a scar..
With the illest of ...

when it come from the heart it sounds way more better.
and that shit was nice bro. i can see any flaws.

-- Wed Aug 17, 2011 11:24 am --

dam im sick as a mutha
but i dont give two fucks. i still spit like a hard dick in a rubber
i could stop and still rap with no voice.
i dont know what to tell but its my action of choice.
cuz i dont realy wanna choose any option.
im like some orville corn cuz i just blow in the booth and get poppin ...

i raize the bar then actualy take it further.
then destroy the page and let it disintigrate in the act of this murder.
if you cant handle it get a kalis jerk,
becuase i got a desire to inflict injury so ile pitty you later and have malice first.
in the engagement of this ravished massacre
they ...