Like others said, the flow is a little iffy. Also, to me it is a little simple, try making it more complex but not over the type. But for a cypher, it's not bad.

I like the concept but I think the style is pretty simple. If you're going to rhyme the same words twice (in this case, 1st) I would use a word that has more than one meaning. With using 1st, its the same meaning for both lines so to me, it's kinda stretching and rhyming just to rhyme.

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Been awhile since I've been on, but thanks guys. Been pretty busy but planning on becoming active.

Im a written tactician full of precision on a mission with words as my ammunition.
My rhymes and flow are untouchable my pen game is perfect, most other rappers are hardly worth it.
I'm like a lion tamed in his cage, people thinking I'm calm but I'm planning with rage.
As soon as I break the chains ...

Dunk contest fucking sucks anymore. I hate Nate Robbinson, I think he is terrible and robbed AI. It's been really boring for the past few years... Last years was just pathetic.

Thanks man, looking forward to meeting the people here.

Yo what's going on everyone? I'm 19, from outside of Philly, in college, and I love hip hop.

I always had a love for hip hop but I just got into writin//
When the ink hits the paper it just feels like its right and
I just wanna express myself to whoever listens//
I wanna try freestylin and better ...