Jus luv my latinas, nature's best work of art, chicas always dressed hot,
They got me sweatin so fkn hard, window lickin outside the candy shop,
Like that fat kid beggin for that cake wit cream on top,
Culos from heaven, big, round N juicy, skin soft.
Some of em would put J-Lo's to shame, believe it ...

thanx for tha feedback boys......u may laugh ur ass off but watt are metaphores and multies man. I've neva learnt tha proper structure to a rap, jus been listenin since a young pup and started rhymin once i got older......

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Honestly I'm tired of rappers talking about their damn bling
I'll take ya chain and choke ya to death with the damn thing
Cut ya fucking hand off and beat ya with ya bracelet
Put the pistol to ya chin and squeeze then charge ya for the face lift


The best bit to this piece bro. I see it tha same ...

Only have one mission in life and thats to get high,
Mary's givin me a boost coz I wanna touch tha sky,
A bag of weed and some liqour is all 4 tonite,
Get my smoke on, numerous cones from my bong,
Call me Jordan and watch me take flight.....

Lol....watt scott james means is that awhole bunch of ppl keep callin this dude out 4 battles. Noble for one is after him hard....so you might have to take a number to jack tha ripper lol....

Mad rap, been thru somethin similar before so feelin it heaps loco...its a shame u don't put this on audio as a rap remake using tha gunners beat to tha song....

Really liked this drop loco. Maybe one sentence too long, that one about the grown man hurtin this one....that line made me lose tha flow abit...

Mad drop. Ryhmescheme was on point. And punches well thrown lol....only thing wrong I personally see is that the word symmetrical may be used wrongly here. To my understanding it means a force equally distributed to different points, I don't know, I'm a car hoon and when i looked in to the WRX ...

Mad drop from tha Collective....way too long to break it down but I don't have anythin negative to say about it anyways...

Kau's and IntrinsicCadence best verses guys....keep on droppin that Collective ill shit....

Shit is full hectic gettin dooped by tha P.D lol....

What an interesting subject. I have this convo with friends all tha time. There's so many things that can be said that it is like discussin a religion like explained earlier...So here's me 2 cents worth as I come from the Ice-T, Public Enemy, N.W.A and KRS one era. My PERSONAL opinion is that there ...

I spit some sick shit all laced with venom,
Paralysin plastic emceez so tha i can get em,
U talk that game but I don't see ya playin,
U talk that shit but I can't hear watt ur sayin,
Ur dribblin shit again, my friend, wipe ur chin,
Step on to my stage, ring tha bell n start boxin,
But don't climb ...

I don't know, I thought it flowed really well. In this ryme, your punchlines should be re-named to murderlines, coz you kill it. Can't wait to see watt J.D.R's reply will be....once again your spellin's out, I'm pretty sure you meant jacked-knifed as a driving manouvre, right???

All in all mate ...

Have to agree with QwartZ, don't know if this should be rapped or sung. I sounds more like an r'n'b song tho...

Keep droppin as practice makes perfect. Welcome to the site bro, and by any chance are u aussie???

Not too bad bro, a few of your lines are a bit long which made me lose tha flow a bit. But that could've been me maybe not rappin it right...but try and keep em as short an sweet as possible, keep on droppin man...peace out.