the fuck man?

soulo :
First I feel annoyed and bothered,
I awoke from slumber to a world devoid of colors
where people destroy each other
and make it their choice to suffer

ruckus:

"I'm annoyed with all these days that are devoid of color/
People destroy each other like its our choice to suffer ...

What's wrong with your voice?

Checking in.

That singing voice is a little too loud right now.

[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eyC5rlIuK4g[/video]

First I feel annoyed and bothered,
I awoke from slumber to a world devoid of colors
where people destroy each other
and make it their choice to suffer
I stopped the noise to raise the voice of wonder
shouting "remember me" but no one ever ...

Canibus lover, eh? You're living in an illusion*

I like your attempts at wordplays and stuff, but you could really polish that verse structure to make it flow and hit it off well.

^I say fuck that bullshit. If you wrote a long, nice ass piece, post it as one so people can get the entirety of your work.

whack.

Take my feedback with intention to improve. I think you're forcing rhymes that dictate how you write your verses.

"past~mistakes that could fascinate minds at a rapid~rate
Somehow in the back,~my~brain is where lessons are fast~to~fade as if my passion’s~changed
Faster than a new fashion~came ...

[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pQPnXZdkzU4[/video]

I'm searching for hope, desperate and learning to cope
I'm mentally broke confined so it's hard for personal growth
I gave 'fire' to man as part of my retirement plan
and now these murderous folks love defiling the land
in the style of a ...

Thanks man. Just moved into my college so I haven't had time to check this site.

He awoke in darkness; cold sweat drenched his face
paranoia closed in; fear clutched his mental state
nothing but pitch black; hopeful words were extinguished
except the white lies that reassured his existence
he stared blankly letting his iris adapt to the night
perspectives shifted; the walls ...

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dope.

Kulture:

I overwrite about the bright light at the
end of peoples tunnels not in excite,
I keep up the good work and hoping
its worth as I fight for my life on this earth,
people fighting for there turf is it really worth the delight? for their life on
earth?,
Instead of going for attack I make a ...