I worked at a mental institution in Provo, Utah. I found it fascinating so I wrote this song. It is also recorded on my myspace if you would like to listen to it (http://www.myspace.com/weirdsense1). Here is the post that I commented on (http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-weird-and-wonderfull ...

It was an alright quick read. Rhyme style was a little simplistic but on par with subject matter throughout. It read a little like "Poet" from the tv show OZ. Keep on writing.

<r>Peter piper picked a fight with Jack Be Nimble over Thumbelina<br/>
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Jack had seen her playing with his Peter, pushed the piper, broke his leg, and met with Jill's pickled pepper spray<br/>
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Anyway, he ran away the other way, jumped too quick, fel slipped, and burnt his dick up on a ...

It seems to me that this was a very simplistic few bar drop. A rough draft at best. Apart from your various spelling errors it seemed that your rhyme scheme was simply single syllable. Which in the hip hop world is judged more harshly by underground than mainstream.
The positive that is pulled ...

I greatly appreciate your feedback. I will definately try to come back to this site and peep others material to return the favor.

As a little preface to the song I will let you know it is about three different girls I dated. A verse is dedicated to each one. Let me know what you think of it...I will be performing it this Saturday at one of my shows.

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The beat seemed alright and I liked the subject matter on this track. Your lyrics where alright but I had a hard time with your flow. It felt like you where reading it and because of that had more monotone effects and fell off the beat a few times. The quality isn't too good but being someone who ...

The personals are very extensive in this track. The punches are all right, however some seem to be a reach...(titanic...overboard). Syllable match-ups exceed one which is pretty good nowadays.

Coming into this not knowing the opponent that well I lose out on numerous personals but can accurately ...

I personally think the 1rst and 4rth verses are the best but...I am a narcissist!