And im sittin in silence, my chaotic mind’s causin violence/
Im figure skatin on the beat, the pure apitome of stylin/
Nevr wildn’, nevr mild an’ methodic like a violin/
tryin to make u dial in, with this rhyme scheme im inspirin’/

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Yo, I’m stressin, guessin the best route is escape, /
Dressed in a messd-up suit screamin loud like ‘RAPE!’/
Trying to gather the attention of my peers while ur sittin/
Starin at the screen while I speak from the pot I piss in/
Throw a fist in… if ...

nice piece man. Like the previous reply, i seemed lost at times, but with a re-read it made sense.
I like the wordplay and the multi ryhmes.
I always find it difficult to logically put together word play and multis.
nice ish...

I started walkin.../
began joggin ...at a pace that represents a state of alarm/
the rays are too warm, ocean is overflowin/
artists are like hiroshima...'no more growin'/
so i ran, and began to sprint/
capitalism's not confined to this/
I'm recognized as an outcast, who shouts back/
on a path to ...

poetry or spoken word is a lot different from just rappin or scripting. Poetry/S.W. involves a deeper thought process, including detailed rymes scheme or organization, paying firm attention to sylable use. I love spoken word and feel those cats who can do it well are a step above the average emcee ...

now my minds spinnin like backflips/
when i type i melt the plastic/
with only my second post, showing skills that are fantastic/
THATS IT...i had enuf and just cant stand it/
f*ck remaining moderate, like LL crew my sh*ts classic/
when i die im goin be buried with my notebook in my casket/
if this ...

I've been in and out of many of these hipHop forums...but this one seems to be well orchestrated...lookin forWORD to being apart of this...
with that said...

The light barely twitches, but my thoughts are still scripted/
inflicted by the sicknd environment thats so wickd !/
depicted cryptic ...