Hip Hop Forum

5 Bars/10 lines
Due Date - 48 hours from NOW

Categories
-Storytelling (How well you tell the story)
-Flow (Smooth delivery)
-Creativity (Thinking outside the box)
-Rhyme scheme (How complex your rhyming is)
-Metaphors & Similes (Obvious category)
-Consistency (All categories included + How well you stay on topic)
-Impact (How epic and powerful your story is)

1 Winner will be decided (and awarded in record)
Losing will not effect your record
No showing will effect your record and terminate you from the tournament

Participants
Omnie
AntiMatter
Deception
Shazo
Catastropic
OMG St33Z
- Calico -
Baron Enders
3rd String QB


TOPIC IS - Surviving death by...

Your choices : (freezing, burning, drowning, falling, stabbed, shot, lethal injection, suffocating, starving, force fed, strangled, crushed, electrocuted)


DO NOT CHECK IN, just DROP YOUR VERSE

Potassium solutions as answers to my criminal selections in question
after a last meal and undressing im tied down as they reveal the final lesson
I found a form of protection, by eating iron chips off of the penitentiary bars
the consumption of metal shards manipulates my genetical code symmetry parts
laying clinically scarred from a medical syringe piercing my layers of muscle
as the secretions of diabolical substances enter, I pretend to struggle
I close my eyes, using body techniques to control my perceived vital signs
nurses note taking statistics while im relieved knowing survivals mine
finally as the autopsy procedure began with green scrubs with scalpels in hand
until I zombie strolled to scare them off as I walked out to the van

Boom Shakalaka, I'M IN THERE LIKE SWIMWEAR

Longing for air, my minds racing, my chest's aching
One moment's a headache, but the next can be breath taking
Panicing as I struggle to escape the grasp of this person
Struggling in this pool of emotions I've been submerged in
A mix of feeling pissed and pitiful, wrong and miserable
I think its all ending soon, white light fills my visual
I'm blacking it out, I'm thinking its over, I'm finished
Never was a time that I've felt so hopeless and defenseless
Hope flashed,the person eased her grip, now I think I'm making it
She stopped suffocating,and let the life back in our relationship.

blah

Through wicked times came my pain, one to scorch souls
A burn uncompromised by the rain drops spitting in horse blows
If I knew then what I know now, id be better in disguise
Wouldn't let them take me to genocide for like Anne I'd hide
Never too be found, off the radar, special forces wouldn't find me
For being bound, encased a burned at the stake leave lights to blind me
As flames rip through flesh like talons of the devil breaths hate Inside my carcass
For this murderous thing is my fault ain't a prayer can save me not even the hardest


Sorry bout quality I didnt have time to write just a five min key saves the notch on my l pile if I show

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O'shit, Cata got hit
electrocuted frozed quick

my body frozen' lethal injectionz to my neck
Cata's brain still at its functionz, forced fed

Still seein light at tha end of my tunnel
dark moon' screaming angelz of death still coming

lord' help a brah!
my internal organz fillz of fire

O'SHIT Cata, finally escapes hell
wokeup masterbating, to XXX.BlackTail.

Man im feeling great…this really has to be my lucky Break,
Really getting late…the guards sleep and forgot to close the gate.

I hear cheers from my Comrades as I escape the prison walls,
Got to the Fence…climbed over then a Shot forced me into a fall.

Shot in the Arm hard to swim my Bloody water let off a crimson glow,
Guards released the dogs and an undercurrent really wouldn’t let Me go.

“If only I can get to the ~other side~…my Homies awaiting with his ~Mother’s Ride~”
I felt myself losing Hope…Dead Man’s Float for escapees this is where those ~others died~

Next thing I know im face down on the Bank…..The guards seemed to have lost Me,
So exhausted, my Dude gets me in the car and we ride the escape nearly cost Me.

Storytelling:3rd String QB
Flow:Shazo
Creativity:Shazo
Rhyme scheme: Baron Enders
Metas/Sims:Baron Enders
Consistency:3rd String QB
Impact:Shazo

Vote: Shazo

i'd say runner up was 3rd String, everyone else had some decent qualities but i think shazo brought a new approach for suffocation, 3rd's lethal injection was the most consistent and with details painted a more in-depth story,

all those who dropped qualify for the tournament, once a winner is chosen here we will continue onto the first round of the tournament

ima give my vote to QB, i dont have time to explain realy but im sure the above have explained enough, i enjoyed his verse the best.

Potassium solutions as answers to my criminal selections in question
after a last meal and undressing im tied down as they reveal the final lesson
I found a form of protection, by eating iron chips off of the penitentiary bars
the consumption of metal shards manipulates my genetical code symmetry parts

this was hella tight from my point of veiw

anyway i better go back to work peace.

3rd String QB:
This was a dope piece of work, good storytelling very vivid imagery and creativety. Flow was good

Baron Enders:
your flow was good here n some multies were decent, the rhyme scheme was pretty different to that of common ones, i enjoyed this piece, could have been better in certain ways I feel, but was an enjoyable read overall.

Shazo:
this was a good read, flow on point, creative, good use of meta's, good imagery

Deception:
this was ok, concepts were good though execution of them could be way better considering the level of your written drops I've read. Flow a bit off here n there but overall this is decent

Catastrophic:
you need to up your game a shitload dawg, put more effort into what you write, make it more complex and write with the intention of capturing the audience (readers in this case) and keeping us hooked. Keep writing & learning

Calico:
this was cool, simple and very enjoyable, flow good, decent multies, nice storytelling, good overall

Everybody came good here, enjoyed and liked nearly all the verses, imo the winner would be between 3rd string and Shazo, both were really impressive and wrote excellently. Calico and Baron had good stuff too.

Between the 2, Storytelling is a tie imo, flow, creativetyis shazo's, metas tie, consistency is 3rd's for sure, impact surely is shazo's

MVGT: Shazo ore complex and write with the intention of capturing the audience (readers in this case) and keeping us hooked. Keep writing & learning

Calico:
this was cool, simple and very enjoyable, flow good, decent multies, nice storytelling, good overall

Everybody came good here, enjoyed and liked nearly all the verses, imo the winner would be between 3rd string and Shazo, both were really impressive and wrote excellently. Calico and Baron had good stuff too.

Between the 2, Storytelling is a tie imo, flow, creativetyis shazo's, metas tie, consistency is 3rd's for sure, impact surely is shazo's

MVGT: Shazo

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ewww

i thought i had until monday.. gross.

-_-

Mvgt shazo props to all

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I GOTTA VOTE 3RD STRING