Freestyle spoken word

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Freestyle spoken word

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-b ... 22517.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/darkn ... ml#p174486

Walking the long and narrow with no end
While on steap slopes, I'm in a battle with a mountain

The big pic is irrelevant, if you cant see past the past tence
you can keep ya 2 cents
I'll give ya a trillion way's to make sense

Crypteds within a murderous plot, will make blood thicken

I decapitate a headless hen, you cocks can keep cock swallowing

Borowing from your neighbour won't make ya grass greener

I send you to the cleaners, you will hang your self to dry

Only you actors will ever see eye to eye

I'm on a path leading to the destruction, of all ignorant humans

1 man army I'm more than you're super soldier

I will keep the blood pouring
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I dunno, I'm kind of unsure on this one. I reread several times to try to unearth what it meant to me or possibly, what you were trying to say. All I can say is that I did pick up that there are some ironies here.

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this was ment as a sarcastic piece
and to get back at writing
it doenst make a lot of sense i know
and there isn't a real story line in it
but that's cause it's a bunch of 1 liners stuck together
and actualy you can see anything in it that you like

but the key prhases to remember are these lines

Crypteds within a murderous plot, will make blood thicken

Only you actors will ever see eye to eye

these lines are the most meaningfull ones of the whole piece
and will give you a better understanding
of where I was trying to go with this
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Thanks for the elaboration!

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No prob

anyone else got some feedback for me
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Not Bad but Some Lines didnt make to much sense.

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