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M.O.E wrote:uppin i did dis cuz lungzz asked

LMAO I ment our battle, for some reason when I try to upp our battle it just edits under my verse. We both dropped but its at the bottom of the page.

Opener:Arvincible, because of the flow and lungzz wording fucked me up

Closer:Tie, sick wordplay from Arv and nasty multis from LunGzZ

Conistency Arv..He was pretty much on everything rhymed and there were no fillers...i didnt like LunGgZ veitnam punch i felt it didnt rhyme they he had a punch that sounded like her was dissin Rell aka R.Son.All im like wtf??

Punches: Tie

Personals: Tie

Wordplay: Tie

Creativity: LunGzZ he reached in his ass for punches lol

Multis:Arvincible his multis trailed off to the next set of bars where as LunGzZ just wrote a whole bunch of unconnected bars

Flow: Arvincible, same reason as above plus LunGzZ was doing sum choppy shit to force punches

Overall:Arvincible

Brief: Arv wrote his verse to be read as a whole which is why a bunch of things fell into place with the cats...LunGzZ wrote his verse to be read punchline for punchline like pause rate...pause rate...pluz i think he tried to hard for punches a lil forced creative but forced...over all a really good battle

TO clear everything up, I didn't diss R SON ALL up at all, lmao, I dont know the dude and im sorry that his name happened to be that. The punch was a nameplay at Arvy, lmao.

Dope battle none the less though, never wanna do it again though...Thinking of punches for your name is retarded.

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i was gonna type up an explanation but i just read thru the thread and domino said most of what i was thinking

what it basically came down to was both had forced wordplay/nameplay but arvs was less so & had more potent relevant punches

vote - arvincible

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-_-, why do I brother writting gigantic votes.

Vote against me but atleast put a category down or something. When was the last time you voted on a battle anyway? Who brought you out from the dust for this?



But yeah, edit that with categories atleast, there has to be some kinda rule against lazy votes such as this.

LunGzZ wrote:-_-, why do I brother writting gigantic votes.

Vote against me but atleast put a category down or something. When was the last time you voted on a battle anyway? Who brought you out from the dust for this?



But yeah, edit that with categories atleast, there has to be some kinda rule against lazy votes such as this.

you act like if i added categorys it would make a difference the end result would still be arvincible getting my vote, but fine i'll tell you why your verse sucked and arvs sucked less

Ayo, My street games live shit, Vince a cheap lame, I’m sick;
Have him leak flame right quick! Caz I got ARHH/Ar quieted down like a behaved pirate!

leak flame right quick = badly forced multi, punchline = blah you nameplayed two letters of his name nobody has ever even called him ar

Call him Weapon X, I’ll fill his face with sturdy chrome! Time to get learning yo’;
Use lines like I’m surgical until Ar sin/Arson quicker then turban hoes prone to burning homes!!!

again, weak attempt at 2 letter nameplay and arson is a noun not a verb, so the line is worded really poorly, lead in bars played as hell

Your dumb, want lessons? I’ve learned the course. Once I’m done I’ll burn the corpse,
Deep down, firm and hoarse, Vince mom likes my meat, but who hasn’t fucked her before/herbivore! LoL

first bars worded badly, herbavore/her before's a good flip but the punchline just doesn't make sense for the reasons domino pointed out

This guy still shops for cards, buys the starter kit! Imma make you a martyr bitch,
Straight scar your wrists, Can’t harm my wit, so Vince using MAGIC quicker then Carter did!

punchline could've been decent but its worded really poorly, vince carter isn't using magic he got traded to the magic

Are you believing he’s cocky? All I’m seeing is choppy breathing and coughing;
I’m leaving him stopping! When I’m done, his record will see 4 teens/14s like the leads in Degrassi!!

i liked this bar

Treated like a meal, damn! Call him terminator, guns have this cunt covered in steel man
This dumb fuckers a real fag! I’ll leave this veteran in the ground like the front runners in Vietnam!!!

first bars played seconds simple and the last multi doesn't even rhyme with the rest

He’s lacking tougher rapping numbers! This hick should quit, start crafting lumber!
I’ll crash your crappy slumber just to leave Ar son all/Arsenal battered and bruised like operation Iraqi thunder!

buncha blah multis and the punchline is really simple and doesn't even make sense against the guy you were battling

This fag is scared to strain his clit, He’s poor like when it rains n shit!
I’m cool since I have patience kid! Plus I got VIN’s number like vehicle maintenance!!

first bars so simple it was pointless to even use, punchline lacks cohesive thought vin's number would have been a good flip but vehicle maintenance has absolutely nothing to do with vin numbers the only thing they share is they're both relevant to cars

When I rap, I know he’s influenced! This homie’s a ruined phony who’s useless!
Skill? I’m showing the truest! At illest, only time there’s Ar mania/Armenia when your reading ‘bout the soviet union!!

this flips actually pretty cool but again its just 2 letters of his name and nobody calls him ar so it lacks proper relevance so its not hitting at all

I roam roads holmes. I gotta known bold tone, that’ll fold bones toad!
I’ll beat him with a stone cold pose! This is what happens when Vince wanders to far from the old folks home! haha


forced multis galore jesus christ, only one thats decent is the last one, punchlines kinda humorous but arv isn't old so it wasn't hard hitting at all



Its obvious mah battle-bars-sicker, you can't dodge the shots cuz arv-is-far-quicker,
and you a snail bitch!! ill straight up put a'shell on ya back' like ya avatar-picture!!

wtf arv is far quicker doesn't come close to rhyming right with the other multis, punchline was a kinda obvious flip but it was ok

'Cappin this kid's skull' like a tragic-bar-mitzvah.. i got the most abusive-punch,
Ur stupid-stunts got u stripes? nahh I only see 'L-eat'/Elite when this dudes-at-lunch!

abusive punch is kinda forced, wordplay was alright kinda simple not a fan of stretched nameplay like i mentioned before so bar was blah

Arv's so rude leave ya spewin-blood, while this faggot cupid-cunt assumes-to-hump
I told the fool to prepare to be bruised-n-bumped but why'd he fuckin lube-his-butt!??

cupid cunt???!? wtf end of the first bars multis are really forced, second bars pretty funny

How can he breathe punctured? cuz i got the flow fire.. puttin the flare-in-his-mouth
Everybody watch his text-fail cuz im not talkin "exhale" when im 'airing him out'!!

pretty cool, liked the subliminal nameplay

What you starin-about? got this ho-changin-up-quick, seein as I flow-dangerous-spits..
Ill be puttin ya to sleep, have "Lung..zzz" as if you loudly read ya own-ALIAS-bitch!!

good nameplay

Admit it, Arv's-ya-favorite, Ill beast ya bars-n-savor it, I've gone nuts..sickenin'!
The verse'll-leave-u-scorched so first-ill-heave-ya-corpse and like ya scripts I'm "Just-Kickin-it" !! **

last multis kinda forced, second bars ok i guess could've been worded better

Witness wicked-hits, if victory is what u pictured then what u-portray-doesn't-exist
cuz the only way Lungzz get 'outta hand' is when I'm amputatin-his-wrists!!

wordplays ok, could've been worded alot better though cause getting outta hand doesn't got shit to do with winning

Ill have u razored-to-bits..cuz you beat who? these two? with a flow so-choppy?
Wow, this ho-prolly..needs to go back to a 0 - 0 cuz he's only beat no-bodies!! ***

bars pretty blah just seemed like filler

And ur punches are cheezy , u sorry rodent-chump, now u sayin that u are-potent-punk?
Nope! cuz the crowd only shouts "L..Ohhhh!!" when Lamar-Odom-Dunks!!

blah, forced multis in the set up and the nameplay was real weak

Bein a "lung"-'blows-and-sucks', Lungzz you just cant handle-me-fuckah..
I'm 2 sick to battle-these-suckers, cuz i make "L-Bow"..now hes a new anatomy-structure!!

nameplays forced, bars alright if you like forced nameplay i guess

killah asked me to vote its not like i'm arvincibles best friend or anything me and him have never even had a friendly conversation on this forum or off it so don't address the god as a noob or out of touch again peon i was actually doing you a favor by not pointing out all your major flaws

ayo whats up with lungzz making a side comment with either a complaint or further explanation on his verse after every vote against him? shit man i dont mind the cryin but the consistency is considered swaying in my book, and stop telling people youll vote on their battle if they vote in this battle in the chatbox, or PMs, its not legit fam sorry. No beef, just pointing out that u need to chill out lol, and me and DJ dont talk at all and if we did its nothing on a friendly basis. so nobody "pulled him out of the dust" but himself. hes just voting to vote. but its good to see the vets doing some voting...good looks on the breakdowns..

i asked him to vote cuz hes a veteran and used to rip shit up in text and still drops audios

Anyways 4-4 lets not lick shots after the battlezzzzzzzzzzsxxzzzzzzx

I don't think I've ever voted here...only fitting I break a tie as my first vote.....by the way, I'm typing this from my G1 phone so I'm not gonna be breaking down verses....both verses were forced as hell.....lungz, u spent too much time trying to hit with personals using his name that didn't hit..& someone pointed out exactly what I saw, ya verse was more of a bunche of seperate bars attempting punches rather than a fluid consistent verse which Arv was more of....I thought u had something with the closer with the stone cold/vince mcmahon line but it failed HORRIBLY ( no offense, but it u are, I could care less).... wasn't impressed by Arvs verse much.....but he gets my vote



Vote= ARV..........



Like it or love it.....once again....I could care less

Lol at this new character's confidence, thanks for the vote.

Humble urself haha

4-5 me?

crimson is nice fucking random as hell how he popped up but hes nice so 5-4 ARV good battle kids -Closed n Updated-