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4 chrismas bars

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[font=Comic Sans MS] :D heres my litto toys for christmas, so much accessories its re-dick-less (ridiculous)
with this twisted assistant midget I am sick with missphit business
with no fans but on my cellin i laugh n concock a few rocks in mah ketchen
hand out gifts in ribbon bow'd boxes to all da cute kids men n women

slangin da rocks on holidays is like saling kids their college tuition
its only to kids so fuck it strap that rubberband get da otherhand n stab an incision
think of me as santa as ur high off a bowl uh grass of nasa plasma
listen 2 marley laugh at chris farley, get a double dose till u start seeing PANDAS


happy christmas or holidays...

w/e monkeys..... im mo jo jo joe [/font]
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any luv...?
Ima gurl u prick
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yea it was good not the best but good. u forced that first line though dog. but its good i kant do dat my self lol.
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we shud battle sometime
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id murk ur sorry ass nigga!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Ima gurl u prick
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haha dass so funny.. cuz It's a fuckin Panda sayin that
shit...lmao
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i'll send your organs wrapped in a gift box to your family and call it a madness "treat"
decapitate your family's heads varnish them then hang them it in my
christmas "tree"
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Panda wrote:any luv...?
Uhh yeah your linkin them rhymes together like a Mofo Panda..
It's kinda crazy though that concept is sik..all over the place.. if your really a girl dass kool..haha especially

this..

id murk ur sorry ass nigga!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!lol ..fukn gangsta panda
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heres my litto toys for christmas, so much accessories its re-dick-less (ridiculous) with this twisted assistant midget I am sick with missphit business

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
I liked your flow here bro words just slide perfectly.


with no fans but on my cellin i laugh n concock a few rocks in mah ketchen
hand out gifts in ribbon bow'd boxes to all da cute kids men n women

^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Didnt understand what you were trying to imply with the first line.
The second was clear but kitchen and women didnt really rhymed.
Sounded ackward and forced.



slangin da rocks on holidays is like saling kids their college tuition
its only to kids so fuck it strap that rubberband get da otherhand n stab an incision

^^^^^^^^^^^^^
This didnt make no sense to me and didnt rhyme, but probably you have your own idea and its clear to you.


think of me as santa as ur high off a bowl uh grass of nasa plasma
listen 2 marley laugh at chris farley, get a double dose till u start seeing PANDAS

^^^^^^^^^^^^^
I liked the comparison you used here very creative i understood it. The flow was a bit choppy but was a good line nevertheless.


All in all not a bad drop bro.
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