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Post by Omega Bill » Tue Oct 02, 2018 10:04 am

Y’all wanna see some emo ass shit? WELL DO I HAVE THE WRITTEN FOR YOU!

Hello stranger, it's been some time
I've kept you at bay while I towed the line
I barely recognize you, I've been feeling fine
But I knew you'd come back because you are mine
You're a part of my life that I can't displace
You always stay dormant, just in case
I let my guard down, and my memories erase
Do what you're known for and mask my face
Put a smile on, let me pour you a drink
Let us talk about how I'm at my brink
Let us talk about how happy I've been
Then let's talk about why you're back again
I've been really good for well over a year
I'm sure you could hear all the laughs and cheers
I'm sure you giggled through the highs and the buzz
Because you knew this would happen, it always does
I could have been happy forever, but not today
Today I wept over words I knew I shouldn't say
I fucked up again, so in your arms I lay
While the darkness consumes me, it's time to pay
You can't keep hurting people, it's not fair to her
You should have kept quiet and not a made a stir
But you just had to speak, haven't you learned?
But this one feels different, even im concerned
I've backed out before, I had so much to give
I told myself to stop, there's so much life to live
But the fact remains that nothing has changed
What have I given besides a love now estranged?
Is it really worth the fight? I've already lost this war
Day turns to night and I want to walk out that door
Go find myself again, looking down at the rocks
Wind blowing through me and the time now stops
In that moment I feel peace for what I have done
Because I'll never hurt myself or another, the rides been fun
All the ups and downs, the twists and the turns
The highs and the lows, man do the lows burn
But the highs were great, that's something to learn
To hang onto those highs when the lows start to churn
There lies the problem, my highs were all you
The laughing, the fun, the dinners set for two
All the trips, all the memories, what the fuck did I do
Thinking that my heart could tell my mind what isn't true
I knew better than to do it, i fucking knew this mistake
I knew what would happen if I stormed out the gate
I knew to keep quiet and just pretend that I'm great
I knew once I'm done giving, my only choice is to take
I can't take your heart, I can't take your love
I can't take these feelings and pray up above
I can't take me seriously, I can't take the strife
I can't take the pain, but i won’t take take this life
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Re: Hello Stranger

Post by complexity » Wed Oct 03, 2018 5:34 pm

Hell yeah bud. I like the clear story telling. Feel for your heart break bud.

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Re: Hello Stranger

Post by complexity » Wed Oct 03, 2018 5:35 pm

You're jacked to the gills as well. Send some of those roids my way.

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Re: Hello Stranger

Post by Omega Bill » Wed Oct 03, 2018 9:59 pm

complexity wrote:
Wed Oct 03, 2018 5:35 pm
You're jacked to the gills as well. Send some of those roids my way.
Hahaha, this is an olllllllld avy. Or are you talking about my Facebook picture?
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Re: Hello Stranger

Post by AntiMaTTer » Mon Oct 08, 2018 12:37 am

I like the tone and the emotion put in it. Nothing crazy with the rhymes but relateable and deep.
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Re: Hello Stranger

Post by Realm » Sun May 05, 2019 12:14 pm

im sure everyone can more or less relate to this, i was actually hoping for some multi syllabic rhymes but that's just me, and this is you


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