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The Spoken Word

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I'm the rap heathen who will leave the tracks just bleedin'
if you act misleadin', I will be forced to smash the weak men
have your wife's vagina stash the semen, it's back to eden
while your back to eatin', slurp it all on ya mustache, the season
of rap murderin' is fact, I'm mergin' in a different lane these days
weak lames try to speak game, while game is action, your cheap reign
will look like King James flippin' through each of these scripts, dang
I rip ligaments, diss ignorance, and overthrow a vagrant thought
do to you what they to Asian dogs, atleast until your brains is lost
the maniac with abrasive gloss, what I spit shines, while you just spit shine
sniff lines of coca, the mind of a timeless holster, I grip time
and murder my assalints, smash brains in for them actin' flagrant
I'm scratchin' pages, while you barely scratchin' the surface
their words is worthless not even worth the proof of purchase
a couple perc's will perk this person, on the edge of the perch I'm cursin'
the God's, the Heaven's only to ask why I wasn't made the perfect person
I can hurt the nervous system, only if you nerds had the nerve to listen
you cannot purchase wisdom, wisdom is already there, but already rare
the beef of knowledge, will overheat the cauldron, as it steams I stop it
like those of spaghetti (yea) all they really try to do is rag u
try to look past you, on the avenue as they try to overly nag u
say that your rents past due, and literally they try to dispatch u
I'm sorry for the world as though all they bring is misleadin'
and you will never see another dope MC as me, not in any season
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"have your wife's vagina stash the semen"

Dope ass line^^^

"I rip ligaments, diss ignorance, and overthrow a vagrant thought
do to you what they to Asian dogs, atleast until your brains is lost"

Im about to google what they do to Asian dogs^^^


"sniff lines of coca, the mind of a timeless holster, I grip time
and murder my assalints, smash brains in for them actin' flagrant
I'm scratchin' pages, while you barely scratchin' the surface
their words is worthless not even worth the proof of purchase"

HAHAHA fucking solid man.^^^ but the worthless proof of purchase ive heard a lot, still good none the less.

"I'm sorry for the world as though all they bring is misleadin'
and you will never see another dope MC as me, not in any season"

the thought your converying in the last bar is a good one, but after reading the whole piece i think you could have ended that idea harder.

Over all better than anything i can write. thanks for postin the beat you did it to. Dope written man
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Woah ..... that was a lot of multies my man! I read it fast, could hear it fast out loud but damn I know your tongue would end up in knots without practice haha. This had an angry feel to it when I read, like 'fuck you I'm dope!' lol, that's what I got from the ending.

I can hurt the nervous system, only if you nerds had the nerve to listen
you cannot purchase wisdom, wisdom is already there, but already rare

That bar stood out to me the most cause every category within the bar stood out, if you know what I mean? I'm a little baked so forgive me. Like the flow and rhythm and the message it held, all hit well. Lovin it :D
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I'm scratchin' pages, while you barely scratchin' the surface
their words is worthless not even worth the proof of purchase

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This was nice. The whole joint flowed well with the beat and seemed like it matched the mood of the beat as well.


I'm the rap heathen who will leave the tracks just bleedin'
if you act misleadin', I will be forced to smash the weak men
have your wife's vagina stash the semen, it's back to eden
^^^That opener was on point

the maniac with abrasive gloss, what I spit shines, while you just spit shine
sniff lines of coca, the mind of a timeless holster, I grip time
and murder my assalints, smash brains in for them actin' flagrant
I'm scratchin' pages, while you barely scratchin' the surface
their words is worthless not even worth the proof of purchase
a couple perc's will perk this person, on the edge of the perch I'm cursin'
the God's, the Heaven's only to ask why I wasn't made the perfect person
^^^Best part of the verse, that whole section was nasty dog.

I liked the flow, wordplay and multis in this piece man, keep droppin.
You can't hang without a rope....
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Post by precise »

interesting drop bro, the multies in the opening hooked me to read it through

my favorite part was the run between "perk this person" and "purchase wisdom" i enjoyed the flow there
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thabx everyone appreciate the love :eek:

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great vocab and word usage in your peace.ill instrumental chosen too..i was just peepin that beat a few days ago.ayo stay up kid i enjoy what you have to offer.great imagery.peace
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