gotta say somethin

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gotta say somethin

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"Jesse you should really control your emotions... I mean look at you, your all broken"
I know it...

Shit how can I control it when I'm open, and my heart feels like an ocean,
And I'm choking everytime I go to lend you a breath.

My words fall to the floor I slip on every regret, un-stable conversation
Got me sweatin' every step.

You wanna talk miss? Aight well where do I start this?
Let's see, I got this darkness, in my chest you left me heartless.

Don't get it twisted, I'm just being honest.
You found religion, I'm sittin here god-less

Body built like a carcus, dying REAL slow... and doing nothing to stop it.
These words I talk with, are harmless unless I'm provoked.
Don't be a target I go for the throat.

Eh.... guess that's all I have to say

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Re: gotta say somethin

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Seems You Just Went For What You Felt At That point And Dam I See You Came From Every Direction With it.
Body built like a carcus, dying REAL slow... and doing nothing to stop it.
These words I talk with, are harmless unless I'm provoked.
Don't be a target I go for the throat.
I Like this As A Warning And Well Put As Well
You wanna talk miss? Aight well where do I start this?
Let's see, I got this darkness, in my chest you left me heartless.

Don't get it twisted, I'm just being honest.
You found religion, I'm sittin here god-less
But This Right Here Cannot Be Left Open To Interpretation In My Eyes.. Even Though It Seems u Leave The Who A Mistery... I Had To Think About This In My Own Terms... I Thought This Was A Good Set Here... Again.. Very Abstract.. And Thought Provoking... To Me
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: gotta say somethin

Post by Borat »

Word. This was kinda just a stress relief drop. I got some fire brewin in my pen, needa get back on this shit man

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this was pretty nice man, feelin the lyrics foreal. nice flow and shit. no qualms here man.
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Post by BIGVIRGE »

Damn, peeps really be, for want of a better word, "Nice", on here huh, keep that positive feedback going people.

As creative entities, we all need to feel that our words, thoughts and expressions are felt even if it's someone saying your chit is wh - wh - wh - whack !!!

Not that I'm saying that in this instance, just wanted to comment on the vibe of the comments.

Catch some of my work at www.bigvirge.com

Bring that feedback on ....

Peace & Blessings y'all

I'm outtie

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