Wasted Away

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Wasted Away

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I close my eyes watching you stumble and fall to the ground
The drunkness is drowned out by the sound
Sounds of people laughing not knowing you
But I know, and this is what you do
You live this life like theres no tomorrow
The asshole you chased is gone and this is how you drown your sorrow
Years down the road you're exactly the same
Alcoholism has taken its hold on you, you barely remember my name
Your dreams you wanted have been crushed by liquor
You know youve lost the fight, thinking about it only makes you sicker
You wanted three children and to be the best mom there ever was
Your dreams were crushed long ago, thats what this illness does
Your life consists of bad choices and one night stands
They dont see the beauty that I always did, not a single man
But the cold shoulder is what I got and this is the life you live
Karmas a bitch and you get what you give
Stumbling around just like you did as we turned into adults
Not being able to say no was always your greatest fault
If you would have given the right person the chance
You might have been able to experience true romance
Could have chased those dreams and lived a good life
Could have had 3 kids, be the best mom, and be the best wife
But drinking and debauchary is the road you know
The wrinkles in your face and the bags under your eyes show
I know you're unhappy but this is the life you led
I bet you wish you could go back in time and pay attention to everything I said
"Put the drink down and Ill take you home"
You never listened, and now you're alone

Feedback would be appereciated. Everything I write about I've seen or has happened to someone in life, if you guys haven't realized yet, haha.
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Post by Arvincible »

wow man, you're so much better at this shit than anything here. I'm at a party reading this and I'm feelin dawg. This is all about regret to me. Good stuff man.
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Imma better writer than I am a battler, what can I say, lol.
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Post by Glamtrash »

Sick shit dude. Kind of reminds me of who I was when I was younger. Glad i'm out of that shit now.

Sorry about your friend, hopefully shit works out for her in the end.

You've got some talent. Keep it up.
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Post by thaphantom »

Yeah i been meaning to comment this...yo i really like this you got some talent...
Never let life live you, You always live life.
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Your dreams you wanted have been crushed by liquor
You know youve lost the fight, thinking about it only makes you sicker
You wanted three children and to be the best mom there ever was
Your dreams were crushed long ago, thats what this illness does
Your life consists of bad choices and one night stands
They dont see the beauty that I always did, not a single man
But the cold shoulder is what I got and this is the life you live
Karmas a bitch and you get what you give
Stumbling around just like you did as we turned into adults
Not being able to say no was always your greatest fault
If you would have given the right person the chance
You might have been able to experience true romance
Could have chased those dreams and lived a good life
Could have had 3 kids, be the best mom, and be the best wife
But drinking and debauchary is the road you know
The wrinkles in your face and the bags under your eyes show
I know you're unhappy but this is the life you led
I bet you wish you could go back in time and pay attention to everything I said


that whole part wuz sick son^ i wuz like damn...good shit dude i liked it alot keep it up
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