A perfect place
Where I could be
Where everyone lives peacefully.
With Jay and Dallas by my side
With Juliet and Eric falling behind.
A place where I could see these friends again
A place where I wouldn't be alone in the end.
Where the rain is peaceful and not depressing
Where everyday is amazing.
A place that we could just sit and talk,
Or laugh and walk.
But this place will never be
For my friends lie peacfully.
My four angels up in heaven
We're no longer a number of seven.
Out of seven there's only three
So my eutopia will never be.
Eutopia
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The concept came to fruition amazingly at the end.
I mean come on, the entire idea of this poem is ill. It's got
double meanings and you can interpret if she is speaking of
heaven or lack there of.
The emotion was on point. Obviously, a difficult task to put the right emotion on something that you hold so dearly for other people to still relate.
I can't complain much at all.
One of the main reasons, I can't write poetry this well.
8.5/10, compared to everything you wrote
The concept came to fruition amazingly at the end.
I mean come on, the entire idea of this poem is ill. It's got
double meanings and you can interpret if she is speaking of
heaven or lack there of.
The emotion was on point. Obviously, a difficult task to put the right emotion on something that you hold so dearly for other people to still relate.
I can't complain much at all.
One of the main reasons, I can't write poetry this well.
8.5/10, compared to everything you wrote
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