Lifes a gamble...and she's just searching for a hand to hold, Her life of "Kicker's" and "Hit-Me" was growing old, a bruised past she grew fast, and found that this "Pot" of gold wasn't all it was cracked up to be, This hard hand was all her life seemed to deal, and its unreal how her "poker-face" Helped seal in her squeal's...
don't feel like finishing at the moment...tell me what you all think
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how do you consider what you do poetry? not trying to be an asshole or anything but theres not too many poetical aspects of any of your poems
what you do is more like a half assed version of what sage francis does with a simplistic rhyme scheme, just cause you use a lil' bit of wordplay in verse doesn't make it a poem
you've gotta work on making your poems more abstract and complex, just using a lil wordplay and rhyming a syllable here and there doesn't = a poem
what you do is more like a half assed version of what sage francis does with a simplistic rhyme scheme, just cause you use a lil' bit of wordplay in verse doesn't make it a poem
you've gotta work on making your poems more abstract and complex, just using a lil wordplay and rhyming a syllable here and there doesn't = a poem
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[Killa Sin]
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
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yeah you kinda remind me of a less complex buddy wakefield (his album is dope as fuck, pick it up you'll like it)
too clarify i didn't mean it as an insult i could post the same thing in any thread here but nobody would get the point theirs hardly anything in this section i'd actually consider poetry
too clarify i didn't mean it as an insult i could post the same thing in any thread here but nobody would get the point theirs hardly anything in this section i'd actually consider poetry
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
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