Fienes In My Vision

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Fienes In My Vision

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Scratchin They Necks Neva Ask Fa Respect,
The Wrappers Wit Meds Tha Bag Full Of Head(Blow)/
Sell They Own Kids Souls For A Rock To Hold,
Ain Buyin they Firs Car Bring The Key Out They'll
Copp It Whole/ Needin Some Meanin In Life Itselfs,
There Fienin Is Bein Never Hit Wealth Gold Rush
Would Be Roll'd Dust/ They Claim As Gods Child
But Say "The Devil Holds Us" Fire Is Cold Must
Clear Place There Vains Take "30 Shots" Like
Its Downin A Beer Case/Da Pipe Replaces
A Friend The Roc Displaces Your End, Your
Lost Not Functionin Righ/Fuems All u Need
Shit You'll Suction Cup The Mic.. Cause Chunks
And Chunks Will Light Till U "Rock Hard" Like
Slip Knot/Pump Dat Junk Nice Its Roc Hard
Ayn Talkin Musik When We slip Knots, Flipp Hott
Ya Brain Membrane Switch Spots From The
Fryin That Is Eyein Ya "Wrist Popp'd" Cant
Handle Ya Life/ Put Da Blade In Da Pipe Den
Sandwich Ya Knife.. U Managed It Right A Fiene
A Failure/ Girls A Dumb bitch A Traitor Ayn No
Way To Save Ha .. When Lyk "Droughts" Snows
Her Savior Workin Hard On Labor, To Get Tha
Paper Or Put Her Head In Vapor/Shes Gone
now Wish i Could Still Vision .. Ain No Signs
On The Poles But u Is MISSED KID../
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Not Bad Man, I Kinda Like This Piece, But You Fell Off In Some Places. You Really Need To Work On Your Structure, An Work On Letting Your Bars Flow Together Smoother. But I Like It.

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Scratchin They Necks Neva Ask Fa Respect,
The Wrappers Wit Meds Tha Bag Full Of Head(Blow)/

Dope Opener Man.
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i agree...work on your structure
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been tellin u this niggaaaaaaaaa juz work it on it homie seriously if u need help get at me on aim -1-
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or you can msn me... lookihatehell@yahoo.com
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