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She said... "Why is your nose always buried in your notebook?" I said... If I spend, my entire day observing the world around me and fall asleep without writing it down then... I'm as good as dead.

And If tomorrow I wake up with arms as pens, a notepad fixed into my chest a place for words to compress and form like ideas in my flesh... Don't stress.

Baby... It's alright, sometimes somethings just change overnight.

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Lets have babies. they'd be phenomenal artists.

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Lol <3

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dope, the shortness of this really gives way to the meaning behind the post its a good concept an well written even if a lil small.

lol at double.

jaz you better tap that bitch before she starts boning other guys.... booh yah

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This is pretty damn creative, for as short as it is. I reallylike how the beginning of it is more like a question some of us might be asked every day, but how the middle completely transforms the though. Well done.
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Love it.

Sounds like a kick ass day dream.

Vivid imagery.

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This was purtty dope. Thought it might be bunk because of the length, but you sure chose your words wisely.

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Thank you sir.

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