Less is More

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After years of time travel
to a place unknown to anyone her age
she stands with the gas can
and watches her father burn.

months prior
in a gentlemans club full of no smoking signs
he sat and told her of how cold the sun was in July
amongst the snowflakes.

She opens her eyes on a page
"left blank intentionally," it said.
the smell of gasoline still fresh on her skin
she signs her name in red ice.

as the sun and moon dance the waltz
the cigarette falls from her lips.
watching the blaze dance across the ocean
she smiles.

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thats deeeep ! good shit man nice reference to the grandfather an good mention of paradoxes and oxymorons! an good title for the piece im no great judge of poetry i dont know what to look for but i can tell this is a dope written good post dude....

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liked it.. good read

deep shit.. good poetry

liked the 2nd and 3rd stanzas the best.
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first stanza gave me chills...wtf is on ur mind u psycho lol jk i liked it.

you're writing always makes me stop and think lol
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i dont get it...wheres the rhymes.

haikus are gross.
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AntiMaTTer wrote:i dont get it...wheres the rhymes.

haikus are gross.

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Post by Glamtrash »

why is it i always end up having to give a back story? lol

Me: i feel like writing something, someone give me a topic.
CBK: Paradoxes.

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and an awesome Paradox it is, I have no complaints only <3 for this.
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You come up with thought-provoking lyrics. It doesnt have to rhyme since its poetry and thats not what makes it so.

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This is very interesting. I like the simplicity, straight up poetry should always be more simple yet able to deliver a message and this accomplished that.
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This is really good. I liked the paradoxes alot, and you stuck to it very nicely. Good stuff
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I don't like it. Why? Two reasons.

1. I don't understand it. I cannot find the paradoxes.
2. It makes me feel dumb (see #1).

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this made me :think:

although, it was still enjoyable.

kinda crazy skitzo but pretty fresh.

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Post by KING RUM12 »

poetically inclined....good shit
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