The-Break-Up (dedicated to hip hop)

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The-Break-Up (dedicated to hip hop)

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the break up is about me and hip hop....



Heartbreak is,another word for viscious
smokin zig zag just to cope wit sickness


swear everything was motion sickness,when we broke up i would hurt consistent,
you would call me and i would not answer,couldnt be Man enough just to take that Chance


met her in NewYork wit a tv stance,plus how she look at me wit the tv glance
who could deny the devil wearin the prada,when you cant even see if she was wearin designah


i thought that i could design-her,
golden miner, but the problems were so minor


no she minor,plus shes not a minor,so i thought she focused
even grown women with the hocus pocus,what i wanna do is focus focus,


i gave her my attention,i gave her my all,
couldnt understand the way that she was layin the law,


she would play the good girl she would smile n' all,
not knowin she was cheatin always leavin her draws


in another man's House,i done seen her before,but i didnt really think that she would Stoop that low
but how'd she know to deep throat....



always playin them games,i could tell she had a spell on me,
and my mind say go but my body tell on me,


and this is real sad that nobody tell for me
i aint have nobody say leave her alone,the pussy too good and the money green homie,


she aint have to pay,i aint want her cash,i just wanna good girl wit a heart of glass
but now things turned around and my heart is smashed,


girls cheat too its a crazy game but they undercover while dudes is out there,they undercover while you on tour,
makin phone calls like they checkin on ya,but they fuckin ya clone aint best as you,


wondering why she would Cheat and sit next to you,
bitch you think ima mother fuckin vegetable,and i aint been threw real shit, life's obstacles


i cant believe it,
the bitch let me bleed,she left me bleedin..

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I cant go on TopCat no more... so... Ima rate dis weit dis account... dis shit is sexy tho fa real no homo

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F4GB0Y wrote:I cant go on TopCat no more... so... Ima rate dis weit dis account... dis shit is sexy tho fa real no homo

What you said sounds homo, your name sounds homo, and saying what you said under the name you are saying it under... Well that's just fucking gay... Honestly.

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lmfao at Kuhlerblynd's reply LOL!

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lets battle then nigga

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i appreciate any feedback on this,

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Hahaha fagboy... Serious dude? Why make your name fagboy and not expect cats to diss the fuck outta you. Ill battle you! Lol splash this shits nice fam i like the concept but the only problem with it is that everybodies doin it!

I used to love her - common
25 to life - eminem
Etc etc
There just off the top. Cool read anyways man stay up

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-- Thu Jun 02, 2011 3:26 pm --

Hahaha fagboy... Serious dude? Why make your name fagboy and not expect cats to diss the fuck outta you. Ill battle you! Lol splash this shits nice fam i like the concept but the only problem with it is that everybodies doin it!

I used to love her - common
25 to life - eminem
Etc etc
There just off the top. Cool read anyways man stay up
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bumpin bumpin

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Yeah i think this was really well worded
and it had a nice feel to it ...

overall a decent piece
keep up the good work

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