You're beautiful like I'm beautiful

Expand your artistic ability through poetry and story telling. Poetry has been given new life ever since the inception of hip hop. Relax for a minute and explore your poetic side here.

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You're beautiful like I'm beautiful

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You're beautiful like I’m beautiful.

People on this earth resemble notes in a musical.

So if we're making kids, then we're making noise.

This world is many things to me… Mostly beautiful and tragic.

Money is a lot of things to ALOT of people, to me... It's silence.

So I might never be a millionaire... But I will be a father.

My kids will grow into their voice and I will teach them how to talk.

I can show them how ugly this world is, and then teach them how to find beauty within it.

I make music for a living and in turn life makes music of me.

One day I hope to find a woman that hopes to find me, and I hope that together we make music.

And I hope that; that music... makes children, because... Those children WILL MAKE NOISE.

And I know that right now I'm just a solo artist... But I also know that... I will be an orchestra...

Because... I make music for a living.

And life makes music of me.
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dope man. dope dope.


One day I hope to find a woman that hopes to find me, and I hope that together we make music.

And I hope that; that music... makes children, because... Those children WILL MAKE NOISE.




that is the truth man. this is beautiful poetry. swell job my friend

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I don't really know how to critique poetry, or if you can, but this was sick. Nice concept, and its good to see a different prospective.

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Illaborate wrote:You're beautiful like I’m beautiful.

People on this earth resemble notes in a musical.

So if we're making kids, then we're making noise.
In these terms, I love making noise. The second line was nice, but it felt a little dumbed down i guess. Like you tailored your emotions to a not so smart woman.
This world is many things to me… Mostly beautiful and tragic.

Money is a lot of things to ALOT of people, to me... It's silence.

So I might never be a millionaire... But I will be a father.

My kids will grow into their voice and I will teach them how to talk.
NIce way to take what most people give value, minimize it, and show what you hold as a symbol of importance. It kinda feels all over the place though.
I can show them how ugly this world is, and then teach them how to find beauty within it.
Im hoping i can do this with my son, no point in sugar coating and saying it's all beautiful lol.
I make music for a living and in turn life makes music of me.

One day I hope to find a woman that hopes to find me, and I hope that together we make music.

And I hope that; that music... makes children, because... Those children WILL MAKE NOISE.

And I know that right now I'm just a solo artist... But I also know that... I will be an orchestra...

Because... I make music for a living.

And life makes music of me.
Nice wrap up, kinda tie it in to how it all began... I've definitly read more intricate things from you, so this wasn't bad, but not your best.

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Word, thank you for the feed ya'll and panda I see what you're saying. This is all over the place because it's unfinished thoughts I just strung together real quick for an open mic I had the next day haha but I appreciate the break down brotha

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this dope i love it lol
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Finish+it+so+i+can+love+it+lol.

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strong words..good ish

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