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Heads roll and on a platter they're served
Cold air whistles, guilotine shots to the dome
Tech, nine and a sawed of double barrel aimed at ya brim
I want platinum in my fault, crhome is to outdated
Blaze you Jimmy Hendrix like addicts, on a putrid high
Acid to ya brain, I portray morbid pictures doll face
Breaks off, kill a rapper 'n wrap him up in the crypt
I read a lot of wisdom scrolls and I got enlightened
Whistle a old song, to a new instrumental
I'm never offbeat, I'm on point like a hot topic
Get a message from your maker, and answer me please
Hope you'll be in my dimension, at the right space in time
Blind guides search for a guiding light, on the horizon
I take away a dream and kill your seeds
Breath deep, you're a dieng breed of beheaded fowl
I describe the end to be near, so you won't fret
Danger surrounds any human being, if brainwashed properly
I'm a rebel without a cause, I kill anyone outside the flock
Burn in hell is all I will say, till you wither and die
Old 'n gray is for black and white seeing bullshitters
don't give a crap about a loss, in a world full of it's own garbage
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I don't know how I feel about this. Were you supposed to be the devil? I feel like you could have brought a lot more to this, I think you should work on putting imagination into your drops, they are a bit basic BUT I can see where you are trying to go and I hope you keep at it cause your poetry could be epic like 2 years from now.

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i was also feeling that because it was dark. anything like that is interesting when you write it

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Illaborate wrote:I don't know how I feel about this. Were you supposed to be the devil? I feel like you could have brought a lot more to this, I think you should work on putting imagination into your drops, they are a bit basic BUT I can see where you are trying to go and I hope you keep at it cause your poetry could be epic like 2 years from now.
Yes I'm a devil in disguise :lol:

but no I'm not representing anything or anybody but my self
this is actualy how i feel and think about things
you can call this Ghetto poetry..
cause everything i wrote down is included in my vision
of dealing with the establishment
I'm a rebel without a cause, I kill anyone outside the flock
if you read this line you know
what i was trying to tell through the whole piece
but because I almost only used 1 liners
things might not seam to fit together that well
in other peoples perspectives
but I can see why you were thinking this was about the devil :D
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