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Haven't posted a poem in quite awhile, thought I'd drop a couple I wrote a while back...
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My journey returns home,
after time is halted and filled
with experiences of travel
to destinations of reality.

The path of reflection
awakens the steps taken
in the days just behind.
Memories soak the mind,
life flashes before my eyes,
years of discoveries
and blessings glide by
bringing forth a light
that shines upon the past,
guiding me to unmasked
realizations of life.

Infinite possibilities
await for the future
to become what will be.
My hopes and dreams arise
on the horizon of eternity,
as I seek to serve humanity
with my entire being.

The signs that line the sides
of my concrete vision read:
'Malleable, wait for time
to solidify the elements.'
Meanwhile, I'm learning
to breathe in the moment
and appreciate the present
for everything it offers me.
What will become shall be.

Eventually, I see myself
raising seeds from the soil
of wherever destiny takes me,
and attentively nurturing
the fertile field that encircles
the roots of the tree of life.
Otherwise, time will tell
what shall be manifested.

Whither shall I go?
Unknown,
sounds great to me,
because my focus remains
beyond self-made boundaries.
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I've noticed your writing style isn't that far off from my own, which is why I enjoy reading your shit. Kee em comin.

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The signs that line the sides
of my concrete vision read:
'Malleable, wait for time
to solidify the elements.'
Nice vocab and verse structure I.C.
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Whither shall I go?
Unknown,
sounds great to me,
because my focus remains
beyond self-made boundaries.

loved this last 4 lines, very true i was trying to get this point across a while ago wile writting a poem but i cudnt get it worded correctly.

overall realy good, i enjoyed this read. keep em coming enjoy reading you work always interesting to say the least.
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The signs that line the sides
of my concrete vision read:
'Malleable, wait for time
to solidify the elements.'
Meanwhile, I'm learning
to breathe in the moment
and appreciate the present
for everything it offers me.
What will become shall be.
Hott shit, had an emotional feel to it. Keep droppin'

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IC Your poetry is clean man, you are able to show emotion and put it into words very very well, I can't wait to see your poetry 5 years from now.

P.s. Your stories are EPICness man, keep THOSE coming!
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Wow realy indepth thoughts put to words
I like how you kept your structure tight
and had a reall good story line between the paragraphs
nice work
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the thoughts were genius and thought out good. nice piece

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