free flowing poetry 5 or something

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free flowing poetry 5 or something

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You're crazy.
You make me feel like I can CHANGE... here's the important part.
NOT ONLY MY WORLD... BUT YOURS...
Who ever told you that you were hot shit... must've been in the sun too long.

You're warm like the type of night I wanna live in.
You're cold like it's normal... like you grew up with it or something.
I have yet to meet your dad.
I wonder if he is frosty the snowman... stupid I know.

But its how I think... its the guy you fell in love with,
Its the guy you took advantage of...
The sad thing is; is that it's the guy that let you take advantage of him.
I wanted to feel your soul...

So it was easy to be a doormat.
Forgive me for all the time's I left you hangin
Sittin there wavin I wanted to wave back,
But that shit hurt... that's it, real talk.

I loved you like you was my heart...

I'm just sittin here in the darkness you left me in...
I found a box of candles, I'm lighting matches in the wind.
If one catches, I'm quick to put the wick to the flame,
Dance in your light untill it dissapears again.

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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Damn this is deep throughout. I want to quote some bars but I would probably quote the whole thing lol. Its kind of a universal type deal, where you just seem to let some emotions out in word form, but you did it very well here. Nice drop fam.
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Word thanks homie

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Post by AntiMaTTer »

I liked the message and the story behind but i wasnt expecting it not not rhyme as much in a sense. Not saying thats bad i was just expecting more of that. I felt it was profound and was nicely written, couple parts made me stumble but it read nicely through out.

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I'm just sittin here in the darkness you left me in...
I found a box of candles, I'm lighting matches in the wind.
If one catches, I'm quick to put the wick to the flame,
Dance in your light untill it dissapears again.
Good shit there
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Post by Tabu »

This is nice, it made me feel emotionally both guilty and empathetic. I think if you live long enough you've played both parts. I really like how you ended it.

If one catches, I'm quick to put the wick to the flame,
Dance in your light untill it dissapears again.

Thats hot and it speaks to... Life Lived.

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